17-01-2010, 07:43 PM
Salut...O sa comentez putin.Din cate am vazut e primul tau fic.Imi place,idea e destul de buna si originala insa actiunea e un pic grabita..inteleg ca isi amintea dar parca prea brusc,demoni de unde au aparut,de ce au aleso pe valeria dar probabil cu asta o sa ne lamuresti in cap 3.De asemenea titlul mi se pare mie putin banal.Descriere ai cam putina,insa merge.Succes in continuare,de asdemenea si eu sunt o incepatoare asa ca iti urez sa ai multa inspiratie.
caty:*:D
caty:*:D
Paul: CAAAARRRL I watched you fire a harpoon into the captains face
Carl: That sounds dangerous
Paul: You were head-butting children off the side of the ship
Carl: That must of been horrifying to watch
Paul: And then you started making out with the ice sculptures
Carl: Well THANK GOD that the children weren't on board to see it
xDD
<----Lissie,The skittle sheep