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You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi]

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Yep in sfarsit ai postat:))...oricum te inteleg in legatura cu scoala pentru ca si eu am trecut printr-o astfel de perioada, dar sa revin la fic. Incep cu o mica critica...cred k trebuia sa spui "simtea ca trebuie sa ia o gura de aer" pentru ca fara acel verb impersonal suna cam ciudat sau ptreai sa spui "simtea nevoia ..." si mai sunt vreo doua trei greseli de tastare cum e cuvantul "for" in loc de "dor" si cateva litere in plus. Stiu ca de obicei nu prea ma bag sa critic dar vazand ca sunt singra pe aici care comenteaza cred k ar trebui s-o fac...
Capitolul a fost interesant...ma mir ca Yuzi nu s-a suparat dupa ce a auzit ce a facut Ren. Eu in locul lui nu cred ca as fi trecut prea usor peste insa e bine ca nu s-au certat. Si Larry cum poate sa spuna ca-l iubeste? Cu o persoana pe care o iubesti nu te porti asa. Cel mai bine ar fi ca Ren sa stea departe de fratele lui Yuzi si sper ca totul sa se rezolve.
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You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 31-07-2008, 12:57 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 31-07-2008, 11:34 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 07-08-2008, 06:57 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 09-08-2008, 01:17 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 22-08-2008, 11:07 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 24-08-2008, 10:57 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 27-08-2008, 02:37 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 17-01-2009, 01:30 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 17-01-2009, 10:41 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 24-01-2009, 02:24 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 24-01-2009, 06:59 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 01-02-2009, 11:12 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 01-02-2009, 03:39 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 01-02-2009, 05:11 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 01-02-2009, 06:45 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 03-02-2009, 09:10 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 03-02-2009, 09:51 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 04-02-2009, 07:33 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 05-02-2009, 01:56 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 07-02-2009, 11:36 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 07-02-2009, 07:15 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 14-02-2009, 12:47 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 15-02-2009, 12:17 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 15-02-2009, 02:18 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 15-02-2009, 04:40 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 21-02-2009, 12:31 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 22-02-2009, 02:06 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 28-02-2009, 02:07 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 28-02-2009, 09:42 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 07-03-2009, 02:25 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 08-03-2009, 05:22 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 08-03-2009, 10:02 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 14-03-2009, 06:40 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 15-03-2009, 08:13 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 15-03-2009, 09:06 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 20-03-2009, 09:28 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 28-03-2009, 04:38 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 02-04-2009, 09:17 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 03-04-2009, 11:42 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 03-04-2009, 11:59 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de love_anime - 04-04-2009, 02:15 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 04-04-2009, 06:31 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 05-04-2009, 12:49 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 05-04-2009, 01:20 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 10-04-2009, 11:13 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 11-04-2009, 12:30 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Isis-Zeita iubirii - 11-04-2009, 02:56 AM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 01-05-2009, 03:31 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 02-05-2009, 05:21 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de Teh - 08-06-2009, 12:00 PM
RE: You are just my boy[shonen-ai;yaoi] - de myuu - 08-06-2009, 06:31 PM

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