13-07-2009, 05:14 PM
am intarziat:
vad ca ai facut progrese
descrierea-inca nu e cine stie ce,dar mai bine
naratiunea si dialogul-mult mai bine si nu am ce comenta
actiunea mai e grabita ,dar foarte putin
greselile au fost mentionate,dar ai repetat de doua ori acelasi cuvant intr-o fraza si nu suna bine
daca te-a deranjat cu ceva postul meu da-mi un PM,dar nu-l sterg
vad ca ai facut progrese
descrierea-inca nu e cine stie ce,dar mai bine
naratiunea si dialogul-mult mai bine si nu am ce comenta
actiunea mai e grabita ,dar foarte putin
greselile au fost mentionate,dar ai repetat de doua ori acelasi cuvant intr-o fraza si nu suna bine
daca te-a deranjat cu ceva postul meu da-mi un PM,dar nu-l sterg
When the world gets in my face,
I say, Have A Nice Day.
There was a time
When I was so broken hearted
Love wasn't much of a friend of mine
The tables have turned, yeah
Cause me and them ways have parted
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I say, Have A Nice Day.
There was a time
When I was so broken hearted
Love wasn't much of a friend of mine
The tables have turned, yeah
Cause me and them ways have parted
![[Imagine: 2iv08c4.jpg]](http://oi56.tinypic.com/2iv08c4.jpg)
weakness ??[/i][/b]