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O sclipire in intuneric

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Heey, am venit si eu pe aici .
Ca de obicei, mi-a placut foarte mult.
Descriere ai foarte multa, si bine structurata, iar dialogul este bun.
Imi place faptul ca folosesti figuri de stil. In acest mod ai facut descrierea si mai interesanta.
Actiunea mi s-a parut putin grabita, insa nu m-a deranjat asa de tare.
Greseli de tastare si de exprimare nu am vazut.
Cam atat am avut de spus. Succes in continuare! Astept capitolul urmator. :X
~ I'm the girl who is lost in space, the girl who is disappearing always, forever fading away and receding farther and farther into the background. Just like the Cheshire cat, someday I will suddenly leave, but the artificial warmth of my smile, that phony, clownish curve, the kind you see on miserably sad people and villains in Disney movies, will remain behind as an ironic remnant. I am the girl you see in the photograph from some party someplace or some picnic in the park, the one who is in fact soon to be gone. When you look at the picture again, I want to assure you, I will no longer be there. I will be erased from history, like a traitor in the Soviet Union. Because with every day that goes by, I feel myself becoming more and more invisible... ~
Elizabeth Wurtzel


My fic: http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php...884&page=3


]I love my family :X They are my life
My mom' : KittyKat
Surorile mele dragute : Renesmee, Elvira, Mailin, Sasame, FrogyGirl
My twin sis' : ~ Black Heart ~
Ficele mele mult iubite: Ame si ♪ Ąѕђą ♪
My Grannie : Venus- Roseta
Nepotica mea : Ioanayoana, ßéкi♡
Ma friend: Moxxy
Nora mea: Oxygen
Matusile mele minunate: Contagieuse, Tigroaica
Ma uncle : Danysor




Răspunsuri în acest subiect
O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 22-03-2011, 12:04 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rukia JJ - 22-03-2011, 12:44 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Vero - 22-03-2011, 01:06 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Katniss - 22-03-2011, 01:08 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Tweety - 22-03-2011, 10:51 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Alle - 22-03-2011, 03:24 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Nixu - 22-03-2011, 05:07 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Yin - 22-03-2011, 08:51 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 22-03-2011, 11:28 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Vero - 23-03-2011, 01:53 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Nixu - 23-03-2011, 04:10 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Shizuka - 23-03-2011, 05:03 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 23-03-2011, 05:54 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Vero - 24-03-2011, 01:26 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Nixu - 23-03-2011, 09:07 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Sho-Yo - 23-03-2011, 10:03 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Tweety - 23-03-2011, 11:36 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de *Black~~Heart* - 24-03-2011, 03:50 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 27-03-2011, 09:30 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de *Black~~Heart* - 28-03-2011, 04:01 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Tweety - 28-03-2011, 06:09 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Vero - 30-03-2011, 12:48 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 31-03-2011, 02:22 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Vero - 01-04-2011, 12:31 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Tweety - 31-03-2011, 02:42 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Nixu - 31-03-2011, 06:59 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de *Black~~Heart* - 01-04-2011, 03:15 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 03-04-2011, 10:10 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de *Black~~Heart* - 03-04-2011, 10:25 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de LonelySoul - 03-04-2011, 10:58 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Vero - 04-04-2011, 12:46 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Kayla. - 04-04-2011, 10:34 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 04-04-2011, 10:13 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de *Black~~Heart* - 04-04-2011, 10:38 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de LonelySoul - 04-04-2011, 11:30 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 17-04-2011, 05:06 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de hiimera - 17-04-2011, 06:08 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Alle - 19-04-2011, 12:26 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Kayla. - 19-04-2011, 03:41 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 23-04-2011, 12:29 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de LonelySoul - 04-05-2011, 03:38 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 12-05-2011, 09:48 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Sho-Yo - 13-05-2011, 10:34 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 14-05-2011, 10:56 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de alex_valy15 - 15-05-2011, 11:12 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Kayla. - 16-05-2011, 07:43 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 16-05-2011, 06:03 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Flash - 17-05-2011, 09:33 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Yondaime - 18-05-2011, 09:49 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de hiimera - 27-05-2011, 08:40 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de RouXiss Đx - 27-05-2011, 10:46 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de hiimera - 27-05-2011, 11:03 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 29-05-2011, 09:25 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de *Black~~Heart* - 29-05-2011, 10:56 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Kayla. - 30-05-2011, 08:59 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Valleee - 30-05-2011, 05:43 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Rose ^^ - 08-07-2011, 11:37 AM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Kayla. - 13-07-2011, 05:04 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de RouXiss Đx - 21-07-2011, 02:36 PM
RE: O sclipire in intuneric - de Miranda. - 27-07-2011, 12:16 PM

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