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Yakuza's boss in love +18

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#66
04-06-2011, 03:48 PM
Multumesc ca m-ai anuntat. ^^

Un capitol la fel de frumos ca celelalte. Te-ai descurcat foarte bine si la acest capitol. Naratiune, ai avut. Totdeauna este prezenta. Dialogul, nici mult, nici putin. In cantitati potrivite si deloc sec. Descrierea a fost prezenta si ea. Ai descris foarte frumos si locurile si casatoria celor doi. Observ ca punctul tau forte este descrierea camerelor si a tinutelor. Ah, saraca Sakura. Se casatoreste cu Sasuke sub amenintare. Astept nextul cu mare nerabdare. Deabea astept sa vad ce se va mai intampla in capitolul urmator.

Bafta si multa, multa inspiratie in continuare.
:bye:
[Imagine: 294222044_b0ac4531f5.jpg]

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Dragostea poate fi inselatoare! Finished.xD || Pentru ca inca te mai iubesc


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Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 03-12-2009, 10:04 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 05-12-2009, 06:24 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 06-12-2009, 04:27 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 07-12-2009, 07:42 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 10-12-2009, 03:39 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 16-12-2009, 02:23 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 24-12-2009, 12:19 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 31-12-2009, 04:04 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rallu^^ - 18-01-2010, 10:52 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 23-01-2010, 11:34 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Vir - 22-02-2010, 02:31 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 23-02-2010, 07:59 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Adri@n@ - 25-02-2010, 08:45 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 17-03-2010, 06:54 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Teki - 02-04-2010, 11:10 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 04-04-2010, 10:23 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Teki - 06-04-2010, 06:55 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 20-04-2010, 10:41 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Crazy Person - 21-04-2010, 06:12 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 10-05-2011, 08:19 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Bonnie - 11-05-2011, 06:44 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sho-Yo - 11-05-2011, 09:30 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 11-05-2011, 10:00 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 11-05-2011, 10:32 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 12-05-2011, 09:41 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 13-05-2011, 03:26 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 13-05-2011, 04:56 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 13-05-2011, 06:57 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 13-05-2011, 08:19 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sho-Yo - 13-05-2011, 08:24 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 13-05-2011, 09:28 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Bonnie - 13-05-2011, 09:38 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 13-05-2011, 10:57 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 16-05-2011, 10:52 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Alle - 17-05-2011, 02:42 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Flash - 17-05-2011, 09:49 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 21-05-2011, 09:55 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 21-05-2011, 01:37 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 21-05-2011, 02:27 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 21-05-2011, 02:52 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 21-05-2011, 03:06 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Alle - 21-05-2011, 05:06 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 21-05-2011, 06:02 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 21-05-2011, 08:39 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sho-Yo - 21-05-2011, 09:50 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 22-05-2011, 12:06 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de BalonaÅŸ - 29-05-2011, 05:28 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 30-05-2011, 07:37 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 30-05-2011, 08:54 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 30-05-2011, 08:57 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 30-05-2011, 09:56 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 30-05-2011, 10:16 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 31-05-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 31-05-2011, 10:48 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Katniss - 03-06-2011, 11:51 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 04-06-2011, 01:38 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 04-06-2011, 02:24 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de RouXiss Đx - 04-06-2011, 03:39 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 04-06-2011, 03:48 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 04-06-2011, 05:27 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 04-06-2011, 05:50 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 05-06-2011, 09:27 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 05-06-2011, 12:45 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 05-06-2011, 02:24 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ^Ciresica^ - 08-06-2011, 09:20 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 12-06-2011, 09:43 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ^Ciresica^ - 12-06-2011, 10:14 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 12-06-2011, 12:53 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 12-06-2011, 01:03 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 12-06-2011, 02:44 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 12-06-2011, 03:29 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 12-06-2011, 04:03 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 13-06-2011, 10:11 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 13-06-2011, 11:14 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sasame - 13-06-2011, 01:14 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 13-06-2011, 01:18 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 13-06-2011, 02:54 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ^Ciresica^ - 14-06-2011, 12:46 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 14-06-2011, 12:56 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ayuu. - 15-06-2011, 06:33 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 17-06-2011, 11:03 PM

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