23-12-2010, 10:42 PM
Bunaaa >:D< I'm first . >:)
Deci imi place ficul tau , e super misto . E o idee destul de originala , n-am mai intalnit-o pana acum . Dupa cum ti-am zis , ador cum scrii :X
Descrierea e super ok , e la locul ei . Naratiunea e buna n-am ce zice [ ce bine ca naratezi la pers . I]
Actiunea nu e grabita , se pare ca nu o alearga nimeni ceea ce e bine .
Greseli de tastare nu am vazut totul e ok .
Astept next-ul cu nerabdare :D .
Spor la scris >:D<
Deci imi place ficul tau , e super misto . E o idee destul de originala , n-am mai intalnit-o pana acum . Dupa cum ti-am zis , ador cum scrii :X
Descrierea e super ok , e la locul ei . Naratiunea e buna n-am ce zice [ ce bine ca naratezi la pers . I]
Actiunea nu e grabita , se pare ca nu o alearga nimeni ceea ce e bine .
Greseli de tastare nu am vazut totul e ok .
Astept next-ul cu nerabdare :D .
Spor la scris >:D<
"If I died in your arms
Would you then give me your love
Would you tell me that you need me
and that I was the one
Now there's nothing I can say to you
To make you feel the same way too
When you walk away I just want to die
And I try not to break down and cry"
Would you then give me your love
Would you tell me that you need me
and that I was the one
Now there's nothing I can say to you
To make you feel the same way too
When you walk away I just want to die
And I try not to break down and cry"