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Kiya High School

#1
Hey ^^
E prima data cand pun un fanfic aici.... nici macar nu stiu cam ce ar trebui sa fac asa ca daca am facut ceva greseli in timp ce deschideam topicul si tot pentru poveste, va rog sa imi spune-ti ><
Asa deci... nu am tot timpul inspiratie deci posibil sa nu postez un capitol pe saptamana sau ceva de genul dar o sa incerc sa scriu cand pot.
Si acum cateva lucruri despre poveste

Varsta minima: deocamdata nu stiu...postibil sa fie +18 dar pe la sfarsit
Gen: scoala, romantic, drama(posibil)
Limba: engleza
Observatii cu privire la continut: este prima data cand incerc sa scriu o poveste si sa aiba capitole...asa ca spun de acum ca e posibil sa nu fie chiar foarte buna povestea
Tipul de comentariu solicitat: orice fel de comentariu. Imi place sa imi stiu greselile si sa incerc sa le indrept




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Chapter 1




What a nice day. Was what everyone else could say about the beautiful day of autumn. Even if it was starting to get cold as it was raining a lot it was still nice for the students that were having their first day of school. Between these students were two friends too that came right from Europe, in Korea wanting to study there at an art high school so they will can be one day a band and sing together.

That wasn't a very easy thing to do but they were ready to follow their dream and do anything they have to make it become true. When they walked inside their class they could see how different it was from how their school were before but they will have to get used with it so they can make their dream come true. The first girl to sit down was a little shorter than the other one, with blonde hair that was falling down on her back and some was put over her shoulders, coming down on her chest, pale skin and you couldn't even see her smiling or faking a smile as she sat down there and the second girl that sat down was having her hair black and as long as her friend's hair and even their skin were the same, both of them having a really pale skin that sometimes got them the nickname of vampires.

That was because of their skin and the fact that they liked more to stay in dark places and not in the sun and because the country from where they are is Romania and is a well know country for vampires and stories about them. Not long after everyone was in class they had to stand up because their teacher walked inside and even if they weren't from there, the girls knew what to do and how to act as they learned anything they could about Korea before going there and even the language even if they weren't that good but they were still learning and could talk in English.

After that they sat down again on their seat and the teacher started to tell them about what they will have to do the whole year and that beside the normal classes they will have a lot of hours for music and dance as they had to get ready and maybe at the end of the year or earlier if they can do it, some of them will debut as a band, solo or duo. Ayame nodded as she liked the idea and she was ready to work hard so they maybe will debut soon as a duo.

After a while hour of listening the teacher talking about the plans and everything there was finally break time and they walked out to see the school and stopped down where were put some chairs and bench in a room and anything else they need if they want to rest there and practice their dance too. As they arrived there they saw some girls making a circle around someone but they just ignore it and went to sit down as Ayame like always wasn't in the mood to just meet others yet and Akane was too lazy to do that alone so she sat down too beside her friend there on a free bench.

They started to talk about random things and didn't see that the group if girls walked away when the persons that were there stand up and just then everyone could see that there were two boys. One of them with brown hair that was short, coming in a nice way around his face, with big and black eyes and the other one beside him, his friend was as tall as him and hair short nicely styled around his face too but his hair is black, brown eyes and everyone could see that they were friends from before even coming to that school. Everyone walked away and didn't sat there to watch them as the class was about to start and right then the two girl, Ayame and Akane, stand up walking to their first dance class and couldn't wait to see how it was there.

They walked inside and went to sit down on some free seats but as they did so they could hear some girls gasp but they ignored as they didn't care but after some minutes the same boys walked inside too and walked to their seats that were actually where the two girls were sitting down and the brown haired boy frowned as he walked to Ayame that was sitting on his seat and pointed at her.

" stand up! That's my seat" he said and in that moment Ayame frowned not liking how the other one was talking and raised her head to look at him then glared

"was yours. Now choose another one " and after saying that she just ignored him.

The boy was sitting here surprised that someone was talking like that with him then frowned as he was starting to get mad but how he was close to say something again his friend stopped him and smiled shaking his head like telling him that he shouldn't fight then smiled toward Akane that was blushing a little and pulled his friend to walk to other seats that were free. Ayame rolled his eyes then turned to Akane but blinked surprised seeing her blushing, wondering what actually happened and how come that she didn't even see it? Then she leaned closer and poked her friend's cheek

"what happened? You're blushing " she said and kept poking her knowing that Akane won't really answer that fun but in the end she sure will and that was true because Akane held her hand to stop her then turned to Ayame to tell her what happened

" well when you were fighting with that guy... I was talking with his friend. He is nice and not like his friend. I found that his name is Yoochun and they are older than us just with one year " she said then smiled. Ayame nodded listening to what she said then shook her head

" I don't care about that immature brat that wanted his chair back. Like he can't find another one...Pfff" she said then rolled her eyes again.They kept waiting like that in the class but no teacher came and everyone started to leave where they wanted, other places in the school or others even leaving the school as they didn't want to stay there because it was boring from what they said. The girls didn't want to go too and just sat there but Yoochun got another idea as he went to them and smiled his bright smile again then pulled Jaejoong beside him

" well how is your first day here and sure you didn't see many things and we don't have class right now I was thinking to go out and you two to come too and we will show you around " he said smiling happy but his friend beside him was just looking away not wanting to look at Ayame as he told Yoochun that he will try to shut up so they won't fight.

Ayame didn't like the idea and frowned but well they really didn't have what to do there and they were bored too so she pointed at Akane saying " if she wants then we will go but if not then no and after that she could see Yoochun and even Jaejoong turning to look at her and Akane just blinked watching them back but in the end she nodded as she was alright with going out with them. As they got the answer Ayame stand up too and signed seeing how happy Yoochun was to finally go out so he won't get bored there and Jaejoong was already walking to the door and they walked after him too out.

Ayame really didn't know how that happened but they actually got out of the school without someone to see them and they were walking on the street, letting the boys to walk first as they didn't know the place that well and didn't even know where they wanted to go but they found the answer when they stopped in front of a cafe and walks inside then went to sit down at a table. They all said their orders and Yoochun walked to order their drinks and well their bad luck or what it was but Jaejoong had to stay right beside Ayame and they were just looking at each other sometimes or well more like glaring at each other each time they did it. After some minutes Yoochun came back and put theirs drinks in front of them and sat down too beside Akane then looked at them smiling

" well let's find about what to talk and maybe know each other better " he said not sure if they were alright with it then Ayame sighed wanting to finish it first and turned to look at him " well how you can see we're not from here and like you we want to learn and become idols. My name's Ayame and that's all you need to know "she said then took her drink and let Akane to continue with that and her friend started to talk right after her.

" I'm Akane and yeah we want to debut together if will be possible. I like to read manga..." she started but she was stopped as Jaejoong jumped a little and turned toward her and for the first time they saw him smiling

" you like this too? what manga did you read? " he asked then they started to talk about this and the other two were just watching not having what else to say about that.

Ayame just sat there not not believing that they actually had about what to talk then she just shook her head not having what else to say or do and turned to look outside ready for a boring day but before she could do it Yoochun already started to ask her random things and after a while of talking she could see that they like some things the same and so they kept talking as they had about what.

Ayame looked a little at her friend and even if she didn't like Jaejoong she was alright with that then as her friend was happy talking with him. She didn't think that skipping a class will actually turn out to be really fun.



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Characters:
Ayame
Akane
Jaejoong
Yoochun


PS: Fetele sunt caractere originale, dar pozele nu sunt ale mele. sunt doar ce am gasit pe internet
So the credit for this is not mine ^^

#2
Citat:What a nice day. Was what everyone else could say about the beautiful day of autumn. (eventual cu ghilimele la prima propozitie si virgula dupa, ca sa faci trecerea de la vorbirea directa la vorbirea indirecta) Even if it was starting to get cold (virgula) as it was raining a lot (virgula) it was still nice for the students that who were having their first day of school. Between Among these students were two friends too that came right from Europe, in to Korea (virgula) wanting to study there at an art high school so they will can be one day can form a band one day and sing together. (partea asta de la final cu "sing together" mi se pare degeaba, e clar ca vor sa cante impreuna daca vor sa faca o formatie)

That wasn't a very easy thing to do but they were ready to follow their dream and do anything they have to in order to make it become true. When As they walked inside to their class they could see saw how different it was from how their school was before their previous school. but However, they will have to get used with to it so they can make their dream come true. The first girl to sit down was a little shorter than the other one, with blonde hair that was falling down partly fell on her back and while some was put fell over her shoulders, coming down on her chest, (partea asta care urmeaza nu are nicio legatura cu descrierea parului de dinainte) pale skin and you couldn't even see her smiling or faking a smile as she sat down there. and the The second girl that who sat down was having her hair black had black hair, and which was as long as her friend's hair. and Even their skin were was the same, as both of them having had a really pale skin that sometimes got them the nickname of vampires made others call them vampires.

Am corectat doar primele doua paragrafe, cu greu. Sper sa intelegi cat de cat, am taiat peste greseli si am completat eu cu scrisul ingrosat. Ideea e urmatoarea: nu incerca sa scrii intr-o limba pe care nu o stapanesti doar de dragul de a nu scrie in romana. In definitiv, lucrul asta face ca lucrarea ta sa fie foarte dificil de citit, avand numeroase greseli atat in ceea ce priveste gramatica si timpurile verbale, cat si in ceea ce priveste vocabularul sarac si gresit folosit. Nu am citit mai departe de atat, din simplul motiv ca mi-a fost greu sa corectez chiar si doar atat. Daca iti doresti sa iti imbunatatesti stilul, asta e sfatul meu: citeste, citeste, citeste. Citeste mult in engleza, mult de tot, invata cuvinte noi, studiaza gramatica cum se cuvinte, invata timpurile verbale bine si dezvolta-ti vocabularul. Pana atunci insa, scrie totusi in romana, caci altfel ti se pierd idei care poate ar fi chiar interesante.

O ultima intrebare: Fan Ficul e original sau nu? Ca, in cazul in care nu este, trebuie sa il mut la sectiunea corespunzatoare. Let me know ^^
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Thank you, Geesushi! ^-^
"these are the days that must happen to you"




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