10-10-2009, 08:05 PM
Salut! :D
well...descrierea mi-a placut, foarte frumos au iesit sentimentele la iveala:X
dialogul nu mi s-a parut sec:3:, dar cam mult folosit...
iar actiunea...ei bine de data aceasta chiar nu mi s-a parut grabita :D
cam scurtutz capitolul....voiam unul mai lung :((... si poate din cauza aceasta mi s-a parut ca a cam predominat dialogul..
in fine...imi place ca evoluezi...tine-o tot asa :D
spor la scris!:* ast nextul!
:bye::bye:
well...descrierea mi-a placut, foarte frumos au iesit sentimentele la iveala:X
dialogul nu mi s-a parut sec:3:, dar cam mult folosit...
iar actiunea...ei bine de data aceasta chiar nu mi s-a parut grabita :D
cam scurtutz capitolul....voiam unul mai lung :((... si poate din cauza aceasta mi s-a parut ca a cam predominat dialogul..
in fine...imi place ca evoluezi...tine-o tot asa :D
spor la scris!:* ast nextul!
:bye::bye:
My fic:
Predestined paths : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13338
[naruto]Teenagers : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13050 (finish
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Predestined paths : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13338
[naruto]Teenagers : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13050 (finish
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I wish to meet you again next time
Love is more selfish the deeper it gets
until you want to tie each breath down
unreasonable, yet...
We climb a spiral of light
the red memory is a poisonous tattoo
a tattoo that shows the future's chaos
if we're together, until we shatter
Love is more selfish the deeper it gets
until you want to tie each breath down
unreasonable, yet...
We climb a spiral of light
the red memory is a poisonous tattoo
a tattoo that shows the future's chaos
if we're together, until we shatter