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In love with a vampire

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Interesant. Intr-un moment ma pufnise rasul: stii, cunosc pe cineva pe nume Alex si-mi imaginam o scena cum el ar fi actionat cu Delia :">=))
Greseli de tastare nu am vazut O.o
Cu gramatica stai bine. Greseli de ortografie nu am vazut. In unele locuri, dialogul suna cam sec.
Incearca sa ne tii mai mult in suspans. Pana acum ne-ai prezentat ideile principale. Ma rog.
Reusit capitol si fiind prima, ti-as da ca nota un 10 >:D<



Răspunsuri în acest subiect
In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 13-12-2008, 02:13 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Kali?! - 13-12-2008, 03:36 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de pffboy - 13-12-2008, 06:39 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Apathy - 13-12-2008, 06:56 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 14-12-2008, 04:30 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Kali?! - 14-12-2008, 10:17 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Sadic_Soul - 14-12-2008, 10:19 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 16-12-2008, 04:04 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Kali?! - 16-12-2008, 07:22 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Sadic_Soul - 17-12-2008, 09:34 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Apathy - 17-12-2008, 11:10 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 22-12-2008, 05:43 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Kali?! - 23-12-2008, 08:06 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Sadic_Soul - 24-12-2008, 11:34 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de iuliana - 25-12-2008, 09:19 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 06-01-2009, 06:10 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ~angelino~ - 06-01-2009, 11:54 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de nolazy - 08-01-2009, 01:22 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Apathy - 09-01-2009, 01:29 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ~angelino~ - 10-01-2009, 01:23 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Sadic_Soul - 12-01-2009, 09:29 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 15-01-2009, 04:53 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 02-02-2009, 10:08 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Sadic_Soul - 03-02-2009, 10:43 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 25-02-2009, 10:54 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 17-03-2009, 11:14 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ...::YumI-CHaN::... - 19-03-2009, 10:08 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ~angelino~ - 21-03-2009, 11:21 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Akya_haru - 18-04-2009, 12:27 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 24-04-2009, 09:36 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 04-05-2009, 04:55 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 13-05-2009, 09:31 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de pffboy - 14-05-2009, 01:54 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Elina - 14-05-2009, 07:20 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 18-05-2009, 03:46 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Elina - 18-05-2009, 07:52 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Khonsu - 18-05-2009, 08:02 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ~Anna~ - 18-05-2009, 08:25 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 22-05-2009, 10:04 AM
RE: In love with a vampire (drama) - de RaYnutza - 22-05-2009, 09:11 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 23-05-2009, 09:55 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Isis-Zeita iubirii - 23-05-2009, 10:17 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Elina - 24-05-2009, 08:55 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 24-05-2009, 10:44 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ~~YuRa~~ - 24-05-2009, 11:34 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de ~Anna~ - 24-05-2009, 03:51 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de pffboy - 24-05-2009, 04:26 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 24-05-2009, 06:50 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Elina - 24-05-2009, 07:08 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 26-05-2009, 07:21 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Elina - 26-05-2009, 09:24 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de L'pti.chat - 26-05-2009, 09:48 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de RaYnutza - 27-05-2009, 10:56 AM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Elina - 27-05-2009, 01:38 PM
RE: In love with a vampire - de Tox - 11-06-2009, 12:18 PM

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