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My ol' new pet

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Disclaimer: Nu detin niciun personaj din 'Kid vs Kat' al caror posesor adevarat este de fapt Rob Boutilier si nu fac profit de pe urma personajelor sau intamplarilor.


Varsta minima: 16, presupun. Vreau sa explorez mai multe... instante ale personajelor.
Gen: drama, romanta, deocamdata.
Limba: engleza.
Observatii cu privire la continut: Da, desi suna foarte ciudat, m-am inspirat din niste desene animate. Fic-ul l-am inceput, de fapt, acum cativa ani. Nu eram fana a acestor desene neaparat; eu si o prietena stateam cu surioara ei si ne uitam cu ea la acest serial, in acelasi timp amuzandu-ne ca personajele seamana cu noi (ciondanindu-me mai mereu). Eram mai micute. Ceva mai tarziu, fiindca imi era simpatic desenul am zis sa creez din el ceva total nou - o poveste serioasa, personaje mature (si maturizate), de asemenea si intrigi multe. Ceva oarecum inedit pentru un desenas micut si inocent, dar chiar mi s-a parut interesant sa fac asta. Am pus asta ca o descriere, pentru ca probabil ati ramas putin confuzi vazand ce produs audio-vizual am ales.
Iarasi, s-ar putea sa fie o discrepanta intre primul capitol si urmatoarele, intrucat am facut o pauza de vreo cativa ani. Nu aveam de gand sa continui, dar am primit multe 'review-uri' (da, l-am postat pe un alt site inainte, ca sa mentionez ca mai poate fi gasit si altundeva) in care eram rugata sa continui, asa ca abea recent m-am harnicit. Pana acum am doar 3 capitole - si voi face pe viitor mai multe, in functie de evolutia mea si de critici.
Tipul de comentariu solicitat: avansat. In primul rand, e foarte important sa imi insusesc engleza din ce in ce mai bine, intrucat dau examen in vara, si doresc sa-mi fie semnalate greselile. De asemenea, sunt curioasa si in privinta profunzimii povestii, deoarece vreau sa evoluez un pic si pe acest plan.

Imi cer scuze daca am omis respectarea vreunei reguli. Deoarece aceasta sectiune era unica (fic-uri in engleza) si nu se intersecta cu alte sectiuni (originale, Mordor's Gate) mi-am asumat riscul de a o posta aici.

Asadar, primul capitol ~...
(i-am vizualizat 'anime-ish' cat am scris asta)

Prologue

Years have passed for Burtonburger family, without changing the alienish routine of the house. Well, maybe a bit. Coop is now preparing for college, or better said, for leaving his childhood behind. No more space captains, comic books and cartoons. He's just graduated and this is the last summer he would spend with his family. Not only that; as he was growing up, the girls were more attracted to him, to his blue eyes and sober behaviour, but the feelings weren't really mutual. After he got one of them in bedroom, he wasn't emotionally active with them anymore, like he was as a freshman, and life got boring.

Mildred has just celebrated her Sweet 16, but she isn't as happy as she was as a child. After correcting her eye defect, she got really pretty. A curly slim brunette, and so all the boys were treating her nice because of her looks. Most of them also dared to hit on her, so it was really hard to find a guy who would look deep inside her soul. She needed her mom but, because she wasn't there, Milly was trying to learn about life from other girls, who were prissy, superficial and snobbish. Not to mention, frivolous after dawn.

But, not only their dad got older, it was also Mr Kat. He seemed to have changed during these years. He wasn't planning to return on his planet anymore, as he couldn't succeed before, so he got really quiet. Coop wasn't accostumed to that, but, as happy he was that he finally got a normal life, the more sorry he felt for the cat. He seemed so tired to try and make plans, that the only he did was eating, sleeping, meow-ing, sometimes purring or walking downstreet, aimlessly, with the dog whose owner, Mrs. Munson, has died one year ago. The boy was really worried for a period, thinking that Kat is only acting to deceive him and planning something terrible silently, but nothing really happened.

One day, Milly and her dad had to go to help a distant relative from far away, and Coop had to stay home and take care of everything. He was so dizzy that day, he forgot to buy food for Mister Kat. The teen stayed in his room to study a bit, and after, when he was about to exit, he almost stepped on the cat, who was sleeping near the door.

'Geez, what are you doing here?' Coop asked, with an involuntar shock on his face. 'I was about to splash ya, you know...'.
The feline raised up his ears, and looked, without making any gesture, at his 'owner'. His stomach was growling, and Coop found out immediatly what this was about.
'So, hungry?' he laughed, ironically. While he was searching some human food in the refrigerator, he joked: 'You know, if I'd be 10 again, I would let you starve!'

He put some meat in Kat's bowl, but no one came to eat. He went upstairs only to see that the cat was sleeping in the same place. 'Food is ready, c'mon!' but nothing happened. The boy lifted the animal in his arms and looked at him, 'Please don't try and kill me..again.. for that, but I think I miss the old times'.
The feline opened one eye and watched him, bored. Without any warning, he shaked the cat and he got the animal's claws in his skin. Then, Kat jumped from his arms and went slowly to eat. Coop's last words were running in his small head, and he was almost sorry that he got so tired to be himself again. Meanwhile, the boy thought that spending so much time away from his planet, Kat's brain limited to an animal's behaviour and all his intelligence has gone. But, he tried to ignore that and went to study again. After a few minutes, when the little fellow entered the room, Coop told him, seeming uninterested 'Do you want to go home?', only to see Kat jumping near him, almost ignoring the question, and falling asleep on his lap. ''I'll take this as a 'no' '', the teenager meditated.

The night came, and after locking all doors and checking everything, Coop went to sleep with Kat in his bed. But, at the midnight, when the Moon raised and an unexpected meteor shower appeared in the sky, the cat woke up and climbed the roof. His almost rusty collar glowed, and he felt a strange energy surrounding him, but he tried to go to bed and sleep. In the morning, Coop was huffing quietly, too lazy to get up, and he moved on the other side of the bed, only to climb up on someone. The teen got up, scared, not knowing if he drank something the day before. Laying beside him, there was a boy, around his age, with light, violet-ish hair, and Kat's collar. When he opened his eyes, he looked at Coop with his sly, black expression, as nothing would have happened.
'K-..kat?' the boy asked, almost struck by a heart attack.
'Ah.. what?' the just-humanized felined tried to say. 'I can talk like a human.. and I AM one!' he said, looking in a mirror, nearby.
Coop was still amazed, when Mr Kat turned around and shouted 'What do you stare at with that dumb look? Do you realise that I'm just a human, now?'
'And what's wrong about that?'
'What do you mean, jerk? How can I return now home with my inferior looks?' he shouted again, almost rawr-ing.
'Um, let me guess, when you were meow-ing back then, you were in reality insulting me... THAT much?' Coop asked, almost relaxed.
'Duh!' the ex-cat shouted, but tried to regain his coolness and think of something.
'Have you calmed down, now? Ok, let's try and clear all the things: why did you metamorphose?'
'Geez, I haven't, but I was drowned in a strange aura last night and look what happened!' Kat said, raising his arms and looking under, at his body.
'Ahh.. so it wasn't all just from your love for me.' he replied, sarcastically.

Kat looked at him and this time, instead of making a mean comment again, he began histerically laughing.
'Well, I don't want to interrupt your fun, but how would I cope with you now, that you're a human?' Coop asked with a 'smart-ass' attitude.

Kat shutted up and looked at the other boy, with serious and thoughtful eyes...


Sper ca v-a placut, si sper sa progresez. Am senzatia ca pe alocuri duc lipsa de profunzime, dar cu exercitiu, poate...
Deocamdata am pus doar primul capitol, sa vad un pic reactia si poate le cizelez urmatoarele doua pana sa continui.
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Răspunsuri în acest subiect
My ol' new pet - de Fata cu par de foc - 21-01-2012, 01:50 AM
RE: My ol' new pet - de hiimera - 21-01-2012, 02:56 PM
RE: My ol' new pet - de DiZ - 23-01-2012, 12:48 AM


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