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One love pleasures more

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#27
06-07-2011, 11:48 AM
Buna...Multumesc ca m-ai anuntat.
So..capitolul acesta mi-a placut.A avut de toate:descriere,naratiune,dialog,actiune,suspans...
Descrierea este buna.Mi-a placut ca nu ai pus foarte multa.Cred ca ai pus atat cat trebuia.
Naratiunea este ok,iar actiunea nu mi se pare grabita.
Dialogul este bun,nu este deloc sec.
Greseli de tastare am observat cateva,dar sunt foarte putine.
Cum ti-am mai spus capitolul acesta mi-a placut mult si se vede ca ai lucrat la el.Bravoo!!
Astept continuarea si te rog sa ma anunti.
Pa!!!
...Kiss me...
...Love me...
...Suck me...

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Răspunsuri în acest subiect
One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 31-05-2011, 10:00 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 01-06-2011, 07:37 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 02-06-2011, 08:01 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 02-06-2011, 09:59 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 03-06-2011, 06:14 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Flash - 03-06-2011, 08:36 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 06-06-2011, 09:11 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 06-06-2011, 09:40 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 08-06-2011, 09:26 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 13-06-2011, 01:02 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 14-06-2011, 05:21 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 14-06-2011, 06:07 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 14-06-2011, 08:58 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 14-06-2011, 09:11 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 15-06-2011, 11:01 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 16-06-2011, 06:52 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 17-06-2011, 11:59 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de tamoshiku - 24-06-2011, 10:43 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 24-06-2011, 10:55 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 25-06-2011, 10:30 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 25-06-2011, 01:50 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Candy_Girl_Love. - 25-06-2011, 02:07 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Alicia - 25-06-2011, 05:50 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 27-06-2011, 10:23 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 05-07-2011, 06:25 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 05-07-2011, 07:46 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 06-07-2011, 11:48 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 07-07-2011, 10:41 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 16-07-2011, 01:05 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Candy_Girl_Love. - 17-07-2011, 12:11 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 17-07-2011, 06:16 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 19-07-2011, 10:00 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 20-07-2011, 04:11 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 26-07-2011, 08:19 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 30-07-2011, 11:05 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 31-07-2011, 10:20 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 05-08-2011, 07:23 PM


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