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[Terminat] Am I your obsession?

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Bun:-
Vroiam sa imi fac timp ieri sa il citesc insa nu am reusit, de aceea scuzele mele (in ultimu' timp intarzii mai mereu). Oricum, acum ca mi-am prezentat motivul (debutativ) sa trecem la comentariu in privinta acestui fic mirific ! :]

Titlul ramane sugestiv , concentrand toate semnificatiile simbolice ale textului.Atitudinea contemplativa din trecut, subliniata datorita pasajelor descriptive, se confrunta cu prezentul, situatia prezentandu-si consecintele- infruntarea cu experienta fundamentala.
Actiunea, dupa cum bine stim este subiectul asupra caruia povestea se axeaza, structurand-o dupa bunul plac.Acest fic propune avansarea actiunii in diacronic (ordine cronologica). Desigur, acest amanunt mi-a atras inca de la inceput atentia, cu toate ca aceasta decurge conform propriilor asteptari.
Comedia are un rol moralizator urmarind notele creatiei epice.La fel si romantismul promoveaza liberatetea totala de creatie - s-a pornit de la un material artistic,o situatie intalnita in ziua de zi cu zi (viziune realistica asupra lumii). Tema respectivei opere este contrastul dintre aparenta si esenta, dintre ura si iubire - in cazul nostru, gelozia fiind sentimentul predominant.
Acesta permite o perceptie critica si satirica a propriei lumi atribuita unei priviri exterioare ( fac referire la punctul de vedere a lectorului).

Personajele- sunt conturate atat prin mod direct (pasaje descriptive) cat si indirect(dialog). Acestea sunt cele ce initializeaza actiunea, fiind similari pionilor pe tabla de sah. Figurile de stil si imaginile artistice plasticizeaza exprimarea determinand caracterul carotativ al limbajului. Acestea sunt diversificate si numeroase, sustinand caracterul descriptiv al textului.
Indicile spatio temporare sunt relatate in acest fic datorita povestirii, insa nu sunt frecvent intalnite.
Finalul acestei opere epice zugraveste o antiteza intre cele doua personaje (fac referire la Cipriano si Julio), fiind unul opusul altuia-cu toate ca se pot gasi trasaturi comune.
Anumite replici se concentreaza asupra unui singur punct, ce ii provoaca curiozitatea cititorului, implicandu-l afectiv (martor dupa cum bine stii).
Procedeele utilizate sunt ajutorul expresivitatii, un fic amplu/complex care are drept scop cristalizarea constiintei tale ca si scriitoare. - aspect prefigurat de titlu (element paratextual-G.)
Se pare ca micul protagonist apartine solitudinii datorita nestiintei sale asupra alegerii sale- registrul imagistic.

Insa te-as sfatui sa incerci sa mai adaugi elemente prin care sa-ti pui amprenta asupra propriului fic, pentru a creste nota de autenticitate considerabil (exemplu intalnit recent )- elipsa verbului -sugera imposibilitatea infruntarii temporalului.
Prin ceea ce tocmai ti-am propus, bineinteles nu am vrut sa dau impresia ca nu raman in continuare o fana a fic-ului tau. Imi place si inca te admir datorita calitatii tale de scriitoare, insa as dori sa am si alte criterii de comentat (ti-am propus acel lucru pentru ca stiu ca esti una dintre cele ce reuseste sa adauge ceva nou creatiei sale).

~~ Gata. Am terminat de comentat. Sper sa nu te fi deranjat nimic din ceea ce am spus.
Iti doresc succes in continuare la acest fic!
Astept urmatorul capitol!
(inc-o data imi cer scuze pentru intarziere insa ti-am adus la cunostiinta motivul)
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[Terminat] Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 20-04-2011, 12:38 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 20-04-2011, 01:21 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Stormrage - 20-04-2011, 05:33 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de alexutzy97 - 23-04-2011, 04:31 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 25-04-2011, 06:55 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 25-04-2011, 07:47 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 25-04-2011, 08:01 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 25-04-2011, 09:55 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 29-04-2011, 02:37 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 29-04-2011, 06:48 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 03-05-2011, 05:29 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 03-05-2011, 08:41 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 05-05-2011, 02:29 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 06-05-2011, 09:34 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 06-05-2011, 10:13 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de angel cat - 07-05-2011, 09:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Stormrage - 07-05-2011, 10:53 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 07-05-2011, 04:47 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 07-05-2011, 06:29 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 11-05-2011, 03:37 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 13-05-2011, 09:35 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 15-05-2011, 12:26 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 15-05-2011, 10:03 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 17-05-2011, 10:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Mizuki Lulu - 18-05-2011, 08:31 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 22-05-2011, 09:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 24-05-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 25-05-2011, 06:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 25-05-2011, 10:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 26-05-2011, 09:15 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Mizuki Lulu - 29-05-2011, 11:23 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 30-05-2011, 05:20 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 30-05-2011, 05:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 30-05-2011, 07:16 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 30-05-2011, 07:59 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 30-05-2011, 08:04 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 30-05-2011, 08:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 31-05-2011, 10:17 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 05-06-2011, 02:24 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 05-06-2011, 10:24 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 05-06-2011, 11:02 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 05-06-2011, 11:51 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 06-06-2011, 10:00 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 06-06-2011, 10:46 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de βεκi - 07-06-2011, 09:41 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Mizuki Lulu - 08-06-2011, 11:08 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 09-06-2011, 05:16 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 09-06-2011, 11:01 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 09-06-2011, 11:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 10-06-2011, 10:09 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 10-06-2011, 10:23 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 10-06-2011, 11:10 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 10-06-2011, 12:46 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 13-06-2011, 08:54 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 16-06-2011, 10:36 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 17-06-2011, 10:41 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 21-06-2011, 04:17 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 21-06-2011, 04:42 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 21-06-2011, 08:57 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 21-06-2011, 09:09 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 21-06-2011, 10:38 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 23-06-2011, 10:04 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 25-06-2011, 01:40 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de yaoi maniac - 25-06-2011, 04:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 28-06-2011, 03:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 28-06-2011, 04:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de alexutzy97 - 28-06-2011, 07:33 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 28-06-2011, 08:26 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 29-06-2011, 10:42 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 30-06-2011, 06:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 02-07-2011, 12:40 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de yaoi maniac - 02-07-2011, 05:26 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 02-07-2011, 07:00 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 05-07-2011, 05:34 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 05-07-2011, 05:47 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 05-07-2011, 06:25 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 05-07-2011, 07:42 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 05-07-2011, 09:28 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 06-07-2011, 10:09 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 06-07-2011, 02:54 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de KathVonTe - 07-07-2011, 01:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 21-07-2011, 11:05 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 22-07-2011, 08:40 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de wilma eelskin - 22-07-2011, 10:45 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 22-07-2011, 10:51 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 22-07-2011, 11:32 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Drama Queen - 22-07-2011, 05:11 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de βεκi - 22-07-2011, 08:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 22-07-2011, 10:04 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de FrogyGirl - 25-07-2011, 02:50 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de alexutzy97 - 25-07-2011, 04:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 30-07-2011, 01:49 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 30-07-2011, 09:06 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 30-07-2011, 12:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 30-07-2011, 12:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 30-07-2011, 01:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de βεκi - 30-07-2011, 02:31 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 30-07-2011, 05:35 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 30-07-2011, 10:12 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de KathVonTe - 05-08-2011, 12:58 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 12-09-2011, 01:08 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Piersicuta - 21-09-2011, 04:41 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Deeh - 01-10-2011, 01:20 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 02-10-2011, 09:49 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 02-10-2011, 10:53 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 03-10-2011, 03:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 03-10-2011, 06:08 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Piersicuta - 03-10-2011, 06:11 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Deeh - 03-10-2011, 07:21 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 06-10-2011, 08:24 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 17-10-2011, 04:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de •Fluffy - 23-10-2011, 07:13 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 27-12-2011, 03:56 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 27-12-2011, 05:24 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Deeh - 28-12-2011, 05:03 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 03-01-2012, 02:46 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 14-01-2012, 05:50 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 14-01-2012, 07:55 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de MiraA - 14-01-2012, 09:25 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Flash - 15-01-2012, 05:28 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 01-02-2012, 06:50 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Sasha. - 02-02-2012, 01:53 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 05-02-2012, 09:15 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 05-02-2012, 09:27 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de hyoko - 05-02-2012, 11:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 06-02-2012, 01:45 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Addeh - 09-02-2012, 05:12 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Zyklon - 09-02-2012, 05:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 10-03-2012, 01:57 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 10-03-2012, 02:24 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 10-03-2012, 10:13 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de PervyTeoYaoi_Shinee - 10-03-2012, 03:08 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de MiraA - 11-03-2012, 12:04 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 01-04-2012, 01:26 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[Terminat] - de MiraA - 01-04-2012, 02:52 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[Terminat] - de Kimera - 01-04-2012, 10:37 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[Terminat] - de Rain - 02-04-2012, 12:17 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Flash - 02-04-2012, 06:48 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Zyklon - 05-04-2012, 05:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 07-04-2012, 12:58 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 30-04-2012, 11:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Alixa - 01-05-2012, 12:09 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 01-05-2012, 10:42 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de MiraA - 02-05-2012, 12:28 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Ciquita - 25-05-2012, 03:46 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 09-06-2012, 11:13 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Ciquita - 09-06-2012, 11:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Alixa - 10-06-2012, 01:47 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 10-06-2012, 11:46 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 15-06-2012, 12:52 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 28-06-2012, 12:36 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 28-06-2012, 09:05 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 28-06-2012, 10:38 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 02-07-2012, 02:06 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 02-07-2012, 11:12 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 06-07-2012, 12:43 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Sushi - 06-07-2012, 01:02 AM
RE: Am I your obsession?[TERMINAT] - de Lexxu - 06-07-2012, 09:27 AM
RE: Am I your obsession?[TERMINAT] - de Kimera - 06-07-2012, 02:00 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[TERMINAT] - de Deeh - 12-09-2012, 06:46 PM

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