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#14

14-06-2011, 09:11 PM

Hello, mersi ca mi-ai spus. Interesant capitolul, Sasuke incepe sa incolteasca sentimente pentru rozalie si faza cu Sasori ca vrea sa o omoare pe Sakura deja e intens. Descrierea sentimentelor puteai pune mai multa, mai multe figuri de stil..adica sa accentuezi mai bine unele sentimente, cum ar fi regretul brunetului ca a dat in rozaliei..
Ce-mi place partea cu salvatu, Sasuke incalca regulile pentru rozalie, sa zic asa..ce tare si dulce.
Abia astept next si sa vad daca planul reuseste.

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One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 31-05-2011, 10:00 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 01-06-2011, 07:37 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 02-06-2011, 08:01 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 02-06-2011, 09:59 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 03-06-2011, 06:14 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Flash - 03-06-2011, 08:36 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 06-06-2011, 09:11 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 06-06-2011, 09:40 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 08-06-2011, 09:26 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 13-06-2011, 01:02 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 14-06-2011, 05:21 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 14-06-2011, 06:07 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 14-06-2011, 08:58 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 14-06-2011, 09:11 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 15-06-2011, 11:01 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 16-06-2011, 06:52 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 17-06-2011, 11:59 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de tamoshiku - 24-06-2011, 10:43 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 24-06-2011, 10:55 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 25-06-2011, 10:30 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 25-06-2011, 01:50 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Candy_Girl_Love. - 25-06-2011, 02:07 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Alicia - 25-06-2011, 05:50 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 27-06-2011, 10:23 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 05-07-2011, 06:25 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 05-07-2011, 07:46 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 06-07-2011, 11:48 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 07-07-2011, 10:41 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 16-07-2011, 01:05 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Candy_Girl_Love. - 17-07-2011, 12:11 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 17-07-2011, 06:16 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 19-07-2011, 10:00 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 20-07-2011, 04:11 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 26-07-2011, 08:19 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 30-07-2011, 11:05 PM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 31-07-2011, 10:20 AM

RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 05-08-2011, 07:23 PM

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