We will still be friends forever despite difficulties

We will still be friends forever despite difficulties

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#67

30-01-2011, 08:25 PM

De ce scrii tot cu italic? Mie nu imi place, ai putea sa scrii asa doar la flashback sau la citate.
Nu mai lasa space inainte de semnele de punctuatie, arata rau, dupa ele e destul sa lasi.
Ai povestit destul de frumos, nu am ce zice. Totusi nu imi place cum Sakura pare a fi intrat intr-o depresie. Ai fi putut folosi ceva dialog, mai ales in flashback, atunci cand fata a aflat adevarul. Sincera sa fiu, nu stiu de ce nu va place sa folositi dialog, cat timp nu e 'sec', fugiti de el, nu inteleg.Nu mai folosi limbaj de mess, arata foarte urat chiar si la inceput de fic.
Cred si eu ca nu e corectat capitolul dar asta nu e alegerea noastra.
Cam atat am avut de spus, Buh Bye !!!

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We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 30-12-2010, 11:57 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 31-12-2010, 12:09 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Marina. - 31-12-2010, 03:42 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 31-12-2010, 12:50 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 31-12-2010, 01:54 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Risa Koizumi - 01-01-2011, 10:05 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Whisky - 01-01-2011, 11:25 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 02-01-2011, 02:41 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Marina. - 02-01-2011, 03:04 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 02-01-2011, 02:09 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 02-01-2011, 02:24 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Risa Koizumi - 02-01-2011, 05:21 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 02-01-2011, 07:09 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Whisky - 02-01-2011, 07:50 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 02-01-2011, 08:31 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 03-01-2011, 12:06 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 04-01-2011, 01:48 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 04-01-2011, 02:19 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Marina. - 04-01-2011, 02:42 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Risa Koizumi - 04-01-2011, 03:32 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 04-01-2011, 04:32 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Whisky - 04-01-2011, 08:46 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 04-01-2011, 10:23 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Cloud - 05-01-2011, 03:55 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 06-01-2011, 08:40 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 06-01-2011, 10:12 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 07-01-2011, 12:14 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 07-01-2011, 08:34 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Risa Koizumi - 07-01-2011, 09:02 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 07-01-2011, 10:05 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 07-01-2011, 10:46 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de ÃŽngeraÅŸÅŸ - 07-01-2011, 11:32 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Cloud - 08-01-2011, 05:16 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 09-01-2011, 06:20 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 10-01-2011, 08:07 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 13-01-2011, 02:13 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 13-01-2011, 02:27 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 13-01-2011, 10:05 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 14-01-2011, 01:09 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 14-01-2011, 08:57 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 14-01-2011, 09:23 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 14-01-2011, 09:45 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 14-01-2011, 11:02 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 15-01-2011, 06:05 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 21-01-2011, 10:02 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Marina. - 21-01-2011, 11:56 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 22-01-2011, 12:55 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de ÃŽngeraÅŸÅŸ - 22-01-2011, 01:05 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 22-01-2011, 01:47 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 22-01-2011, 09:37 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 23-01-2011, 06:08 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 23-01-2011, 06:48 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Marina. - 23-01-2011, 07:11 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 23-01-2011, 07:56 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 23-01-2011, 08:19 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 24-01-2011, 04:42 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 27-01-2011, 02:32 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 27-01-2011, 03:25 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 27-01-2011, 04:08 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Risa Koizumi - 27-01-2011, 07:33 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 27-01-2011, 11:44 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Turta Dulce - 29-01-2011, 12:14 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 29-01-2011, 12:15 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 29-01-2011, 07:09 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 30-01-2011, 05:31 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 30-01-2011, 08:54 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Mariah . - 30-01-2011, 06:09 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 30-01-2011, 08:25 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Turta Dulce - 30-01-2011, 08:29 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 30-01-2011, 08:32 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Dufresne - 30-01-2011, 10:21 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 30-01-2011, 10:30 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 01-02-2011, 12:40 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 04-02-2011, 02:46 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 04-02-2011, 04:58 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 05-02-2011, 12:36 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Turta Dulce - 05-02-2011, 09:55 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de â€¢Ð½Ä…ÐºÃ¼â€¢ - 05-02-2011, 11:06 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 05-02-2011, 11:14 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 06-02-2011, 02:49 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Turta Dulce - 06-02-2011, 11:21 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 06-02-2011, 11:42 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 06-02-2011, 01:56 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Hakusor. - 11-02-2011, 10:50 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 11-02-2011, 11:16 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 12-02-2011, 12:56 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 13-02-2011, 05:32 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Rose ^^ - 16-02-2011, 11:28 AM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Hakusor. - 20-02-2011, 09:12 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 20-02-2011, 09:24 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Rose ^^ - 20-02-2011, 10:01 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de ~*Fallen* ~* Angel*~ - 20-02-2011, 10:25 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de *ILY Yaoi Maniac* - 20-02-2011, 10:54 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Moon princess - 20-02-2011, 11:03 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 23-02-2011, 08:38 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Flash - 12-03-2011, 04:28 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Zummy - 13-03-2011, 12:26 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Vero - 14-03-2011, 06:10 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de DeDal N. - 14-03-2011, 06:25 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de Rose ^^ - 14-03-2011, 09:12 PM

RE: We will still be friends forever despite difficulties - de MÃ¹sÃ¨ - 18-07-2011, 03:20 PM

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