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[Terminat] Obsession [+16] [yaoi]

#48
am trecut si eu pe aici 65, dar inainte de a-mi spune parerea fac un of ca majoritatea inca nu au inteles: de ce va chinuiti sa umpleti un post cu criza voastra de nervi, prea multe emoticons (sau ceva de genu >.<"), ceva puncte si apasatul tastei "enter" aiurea, cand puteti spune direct: tare fic-ul, astept "nextul" si ganbate (apropo, in japoneza se pune n inainte de b o_o" . Poate va fi considerat spam, dar inainte era "mai spam" >.< si nici nu necesita atata timp tastarea, ca e cam aceeasi chestie doar ca mai scurta.

on (ca deja am vorbit prea mult 21) :
greseli...am vazut ca ai ceva probleme cu tastarea, poate ar trebui sa recitesti capitolul dupa ce il scrii pentru corectarea eventualelor greseli. Imi place cum descrii. Unele lucruri sunt cam "neasteptate". Cum de mereu cand venea Shinsuke trebuia sa plece Sousuke undeva, iar Yuri o patea? O_o Trebuia sa fie ceva care sa nu para asa "aiurea" (nu e chiar cuvantul potrivit, dar altul nu am gasit >.<" ) sa fie o situatiea mai...altfel...
Vad ca te pricepi la fic-urile de genu', dar mai ai putin de lucrat la replici, adica sa faci ca o replica sa fie "evidenta" (dar nu astfel incat sa iti dai seama de ea) din partea personajelor. Nu stiu cat ai inteles, nu ma pricep la explicat ^_^", dar oricum nu e o greseala prea mare, esti chiar foarte aproape de "adevar".



Răspunsuri în acest subiect
[Terminat] Obsession [+16] [yaoi] - de Lye - 02-07-2008, 07:29 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Yaoi Queen - 02-07-2008, 07:35 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Strawberry Ice - 02-07-2008, 08:04 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Budinca - 02-07-2008, 08:04 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de bastard_in_love - 02-07-2008, 09:35 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 04-07-2008, 10:37 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Strawberry Ice - 04-07-2008, 10:55 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Budinca - 05-07-2008, 10:04 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de bastard_in_love - 05-07-2008, 02:21 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 07-07-2008, 07:45 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 16-07-2008, 12:44 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 18-07-2008, 11:17 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Sol - 19-07-2008, 12:07 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 22-07-2008, 11:01 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 25-07-2008, 02:13 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Budinca - 25-07-2008, 02:33 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Yaoi Queen - 28-07-2008, 10:45 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 30-07-2008, 11:27 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Yaoi Queen - 30-07-2008, 11:42 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de dia_love_gackt - 31-07-2008, 12:36 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 20-08-2008, 10:01 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de dia_love_gackt - 20-08-2008, 10:12 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Ice_angel_234 - 20-08-2008, 11:58 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Mitsukai Yoru - 21-08-2008, 03:31 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de bastard_in_love - 22-08-2008, 10:58 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Teh - 22-08-2008, 10:47 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 23-08-2008, 07:56 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Teh - 23-08-2008, 08:16 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Cryzy - 23-08-2008, 08:33 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de dia_love_gackt - 24-08-2008, 10:10 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) - de Lye - 26-08-2008, 06:57 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 26-08-2008, 09:08 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaoi Queen - 26-08-2008, 11:03 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Ice_angel_234 - 27-08-2008, 12:07 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Teh - 27-08-2008, 12:13 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 29-08-2008, 03:47 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Mitsukai Yoru - 29-08-2008, 11:04 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 29-08-2008, 11:53 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaoi Queen - 29-08-2008, 12:08 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Ice_angel_234 - 29-08-2008, 01:22 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de MisS.sAdiStic - 29-08-2008, 05:21 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Teh - 29-08-2008, 06:44 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 01-09-2008, 12:28 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaoi Queen - 01-09-2008, 11:10 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 01-09-2008, 12:44 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 03-09-2008, 07:48 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de nibbles - 04-09-2008, 08:30 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 05-09-2008, 12:44 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 10-09-2008, 12:47 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 10-09-2008, 11:10 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 16-09-2008, 12:46 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 16-09-2008, 02:40 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 26-09-2008, 09:02 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Flash - 27-09-2008, 11:06 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Naruse_Ryo - 27-09-2008, 11:10 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 30-09-2008, 03:01 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 02-10-2008, 08:43 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 04-10-2008, 06:59 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 08-10-2008, 08:56 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 10-10-2008, 02:11 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 13-10-2008, 06:19 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Flash - 13-10-2008, 07:35 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 17-10-2008, 07:23 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Mitsukai Yoru - 17-10-2008, 09:26 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 18-10-2008, 08:08 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 21-10-2008, 12:00 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Kitsune's Iris - 21-10-2008, 07:13 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 24-10-2008, 07:42 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 24-10-2008, 08:08 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Naruse_Ryo - 25-10-2008, 02:50 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 26-10-2008, 10:58 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 28-10-2008, 04:32 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Naruse_Ryo - 28-10-2008, 04:50 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 30-10-2008, 10:32 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 31-10-2008, 04:21 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 31-10-2008, 11:37 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 04-11-2008, 05:04 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 04-11-2008, 11:47 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 05-11-2008, 02:49 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 07-11-2008, 05:35 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 07-11-2008, 07:12 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 07-11-2008, 07:29 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 10-11-2008, 04:36 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Naruse_Ryo - 10-11-2008, 04:53 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 10-11-2008, 07:49 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 12-11-2008, 04:26 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 13-11-2008, 11:10 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 15-11-2008, 10:49 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 15-11-2008, 08:31 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 17-11-2008, 10:33 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 19-11-2008, 03:54 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 19-11-2008, 09:56 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 21-11-2008, 03:18 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 22-11-2008, 11:27 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 25-11-2008, 11:18 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 26-11-2008, 12:58 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 26-11-2008, 06:31 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 29-11-2008, 04:27 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 29-11-2008, 06:03 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 29-11-2008, 09:03 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Aylin - 30-11-2008, 03:14 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de sweet_zoey - 01-12-2008, 07:29 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 04-12-2008, 09:33 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 05-12-2008, 09:21 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 05-12-2008, 09:37 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 05-12-2008, 09:41 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 05-12-2008, 11:01 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 06-12-2008, 03:25 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 15-12-2008, 06:43 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Mitsukai Yoru - 15-12-2008, 01:02 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de YuuraBo - 15-12-2008, 07:04 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 16-12-2008, 12:39 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 16-12-2008, 05:34 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 19-12-2008, 08:20 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 20-12-2008, 03:58 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de NiyaTai - 20-12-2008, 09:22 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 24-12-2008, 02:11 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 27-12-2008, 11:44 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 28-12-2008, 05:53 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Pure Love - 29-12-2008, 03:03 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 29-12-2008, 05:03 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 29-12-2008, 11:54 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 01-01-2009, 10:07 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Aiumy - 04-01-2009, 12:12 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de KYM - 04-01-2009, 08:38 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 05-01-2009, 06:35 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 05-01-2009, 09:49 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 08-01-2009, 11:45 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 09-01-2009, 12:16 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 09-01-2009, 11:41 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 09-01-2009, 08:34 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de sweet_zoey - 09-01-2009, 10:04 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yukira1234 - 10-01-2009, 11:37 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 12-01-2009, 10:34 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 13-01-2009, 10:53 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 16-01-2009, 05:16 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Child Of Sunset - 16-01-2009, 10:40 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de sweet_zoey - 20-01-2009, 09:22 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 22-01-2009, 05:52 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 22-01-2009, 07:56 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Kido - 23-01-2009, 03:39 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 23-01-2009, 08:47 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de myuu - 23-01-2009, 11:26 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de sweet_zoey - 31-01-2009, 11:47 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 06-02-2009, 02:21 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de sweet_zoey - 07-02-2009, 09:32 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 23-02-2009, 03:17 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Ryuu - 26-02-2009, 11:56 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de roze - 27-02-2009, 05:18 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 03-03-2009, 01:55 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaku-chin - 03-03-2009, 03:19 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de roze - 03-03-2009, 04:11 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 11-03-2009, 06:10 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaku-chin - 11-03-2009, 07:29 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 11-03-2009, 08:43 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 23-03-2009, 07:05 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaku-chin - 23-03-2009, 12:38 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 26-03-2009, 09:50 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alexi - 29-03-2009, 12:52 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yukira1234 - 29-03-2009, 03:40 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de chrissta - 30-03-2009, 04:59 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 04-04-2009, 03:13 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de chrissta - 04-04-2009, 01:42 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de KYM - 05-04-2009, 05:28 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 12-04-2009, 01:54 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alexi - 12-04-2009, 09:52 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Yaku-chin - 12-04-2009, 01:15 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 12-04-2009, 08:50 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de KYM - 21-04-2009, 10:47 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Just Sugar - 22-04-2009, 08:20 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de chrissta - 22-04-2009, 07:42 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 29-04-2009, 02:53 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alexi - 29-04-2009, 07:07 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de chrissta - 29-04-2009, 02:37 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de dia_love_gackt - 01-05-2009, 02:54 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Goddess of Cookies - 02-05-2009, 01:12 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 12-05-2009, 02:22 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alexi - 12-05-2009, 07:06 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de chrissta - 12-05-2009, 02:42 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Alysu - 13-05-2009, 01:01 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Just Sugar - 13-05-2009, 06:52 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Lye - 12-06-2009, 02:44 AM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de chrissta - 14-06-2009, 12:15 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Just Sugar - 16-06-2009, 10:21 PM
RE: Obsession(yaoi) 16+ - de Amy8D - 18-06-2009, 06:55 PM

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