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[Terminat] Am I your obsession?

#49
Capitol nou pe care l-am observat singura 4.

Sa vedem ce avem aici. Actiune,descriere,dialog, evolutie. Gustul dulce amarui/letal ce-mi alina supravietuirea. Well, dupa cum am si spus si-mi sustin cu incredere conceptia, acest fic este unul dintre preferatele mele, de aceea nici nu am multe de adaugat (*bubu se simte prost in privinta acestui fapt*).
Ideea- mi-a placut cum ai continuat-o, in sfarsit hranindu-mi apetenta pentru yaoi (ma cunosti destul de bine ca sa stii ca aceasta trasatura ma defineste de cand m-am nascut ). Cu toate ca logic e un viol, practic santaj , acest lucru tinde spre perfectiune, scena fiind contemplata intr-un mod placut. (detaliata/ampla/complexa). Bineinteles ca nici din partea ta nu ma asteptam mai prejos, stiind de ce esti capabila.

Descrierea, ortografie [...] - Ei bine, sa stii ca greseli eu n-am observat (ori sunt prea chioara*straniu.*). Descrierea si dialogul stii deja ca le mulezi perfect pe situatie, nuantand fiecare cuant prin reactiile atribuite cu atentie personajelor. Nu stiu de ce, dar abia acum am facut corelatie intre titlu si capitol.Este prima oara cand ma gandesc simultan la cele doua, pana aucm fiind mult prea captata asupra actiunii. Nu spun ca acest lucru este un dezavantaj, dimpotriva - aceasta trebuie sa fie mentinuta prin orice detaliu.
Avand in vedere ca replicile n-au fost lipsite de ironie si umor (depinde acum din ce perspectiva privesti), acestea au fost si explicite.

Bun gata~~ Ma apuca durerea de cap si nu gandesc coerent. 4
Dupa cum am spus, capitolul este cum ma asteptam : reusit, captivant s.a.
Si ultima mea replica ce marcheaza sfarsitul "Astept next'u cat mai repede!"
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[Terminat] Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 20-04-2011, 12:38 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 20-04-2011, 01:21 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Stormrage - 20-04-2011, 05:33 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de alexutzy97 - 23-04-2011, 04:31 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 25-04-2011, 06:55 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 25-04-2011, 07:47 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 25-04-2011, 08:01 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 25-04-2011, 09:55 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 29-04-2011, 02:37 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 29-04-2011, 06:48 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 03-05-2011, 05:29 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 03-05-2011, 08:41 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 05-05-2011, 02:29 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 06-05-2011, 09:34 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 06-05-2011, 10:13 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de angel cat - 07-05-2011, 09:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Stormrage - 07-05-2011, 10:53 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 07-05-2011, 04:47 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 07-05-2011, 06:29 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 11-05-2011, 03:37 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 13-05-2011, 09:35 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 15-05-2011, 12:26 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 15-05-2011, 10:03 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 17-05-2011, 10:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Mizuki Lulu - 18-05-2011, 08:31 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 22-05-2011, 09:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 24-05-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 25-05-2011, 06:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 25-05-2011, 10:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 26-05-2011, 09:15 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Mizuki Lulu - 29-05-2011, 11:23 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 30-05-2011, 05:20 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 30-05-2011, 05:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 30-05-2011, 07:16 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Ellys - 30-05-2011, 07:59 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 30-05-2011, 08:04 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 30-05-2011, 08:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 31-05-2011, 10:17 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 05-06-2011, 02:24 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 05-06-2011, 10:24 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 05-06-2011, 11:02 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 05-06-2011, 11:51 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 06-06-2011, 10:00 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 06-06-2011, 10:46 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de βεκi - 07-06-2011, 09:41 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Mizuki Lulu - 08-06-2011, 11:08 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 09-06-2011, 05:16 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 09-06-2011, 11:01 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 09-06-2011, 11:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 10-06-2011, 10:09 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 10-06-2011, 10:23 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 10-06-2011, 11:10 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 10-06-2011, 12:46 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 13-06-2011, 08:54 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 16-06-2011, 10:36 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 17-06-2011, 10:41 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 21-06-2011, 04:17 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de .Dudiii - 21-06-2011, 04:42 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 21-06-2011, 08:57 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 21-06-2011, 09:09 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 21-06-2011, 10:38 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 23-06-2011, 10:04 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 25-06-2011, 01:40 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de yaoi maniac - 25-06-2011, 04:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 28-06-2011, 03:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 28-06-2011, 04:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de alexutzy97 - 28-06-2011, 07:33 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 28-06-2011, 08:26 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 29-06-2011, 10:42 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 30-06-2011, 06:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 02-07-2011, 12:40 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de yaoi maniac - 02-07-2011, 05:26 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 02-07-2011, 07:00 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 05-07-2011, 05:34 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 05-07-2011, 05:47 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 05-07-2011, 06:25 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 05-07-2011, 07:42 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 05-07-2011, 09:28 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kd.sens - 06-07-2011, 10:09 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 06-07-2011, 02:54 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de KathVonTe - 07-07-2011, 01:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 21-07-2011, 11:05 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 22-07-2011, 08:40 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de wilma eelskin - 22-07-2011, 10:45 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 22-07-2011, 10:51 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 22-07-2011, 11:32 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Drama Queen - 22-07-2011, 05:11 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de βεκi - 22-07-2011, 08:30 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 22-07-2011, 10:04 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de FrogyGirl - 25-07-2011, 02:50 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de alexutzy97 - 25-07-2011, 04:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 30-07-2011, 01:49 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 30-07-2011, 09:06 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 30-07-2011, 12:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 30-07-2011, 12:43 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Blue Sky - 30-07-2011, 01:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de βεκi - 30-07-2011, 02:31 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 30-07-2011, 05:35 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Camelie. - 30-07-2011, 10:12 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de KathVonTe - 05-08-2011, 12:58 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 12-09-2011, 01:08 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Piersicuta - 21-09-2011, 04:41 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Deeh - 01-10-2011, 01:20 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Rain - 02-10-2011, 09:49 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de MiraA - 02-10-2011, 10:53 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 03-10-2011, 03:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Addeh - 03-10-2011, 06:08 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Piersicuta - 03-10-2011, 06:11 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Deeh - 03-10-2011, 07:21 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Flash - 06-10-2011, 08:24 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Aiwendil - 17-10-2011, 04:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de •Fluffy - 23-10-2011, 07:13 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Erion. - 27-12-2011, 03:56 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Kimera - 27-12-2011, 05:24 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Deeh - 28-12-2011, 05:03 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? (+18) - de Zyklon - 03-01-2012, 02:46 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 14-01-2012, 05:50 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 14-01-2012, 07:55 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de MiraA - 14-01-2012, 09:25 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Flash - 15-01-2012, 05:28 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 01-02-2012, 06:50 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Sasha. - 02-02-2012, 01:53 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 05-02-2012, 09:15 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 05-02-2012, 09:27 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de hyoko - 05-02-2012, 11:06 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 06-02-2012, 01:45 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Addeh - 09-02-2012, 05:12 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Zyklon - 09-02-2012, 05:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 10-03-2012, 01:57 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 10-03-2012, 02:24 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 10-03-2012, 10:13 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de PervyTeoYaoi_Shinee - 10-03-2012, 03:08 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de MiraA - 11-03-2012, 12:04 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 01-04-2012, 01:26 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[Terminat] - de MiraA - 01-04-2012, 02:52 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[Terminat] - de Kimera - 01-04-2012, 10:37 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[Terminat] - de Rain - 02-04-2012, 12:17 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Flash - 02-04-2012, 06:48 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Zyklon - 05-04-2012, 05:14 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 07-04-2012, 12:58 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 30-04-2012, 11:18 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Alixa - 01-05-2012, 12:09 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 01-05-2012, 10:42 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de MiraA - 02-05-2012, 12:28 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Ciquita - 25-05-2012, 03:46 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 09-06-2012, 11:13 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Ciquita - 09-06-2012, 11:51 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Alixa - 10-06-2012, 01:47 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 10-06-2012, 11:46 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 15-06-2012, 12:52 PM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 28-06-2012, 12:36 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Lexxu - 28-06-2012, 09:05 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 28-06-2012, 10:38 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Rain - 02-07-2012, 02:06 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Kimera - 02-07-2012, 11:12 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Erion. - 06-07-2012, 12:43 AM
RE: Am I your obsession? - de Sushi - 06-07-2012, 01:02 AM
RE: Am I your obsession?[TERMINAT] - de Lexxu - 06-07-2012, 09:27 AM
RE: Am I your obsession?[TERMINAT] - de Kimera - 06-07-2012, 02:00 PM
RE: Am I your obsession?[TERMINAT] - de Deeh - 12-09-2012, 06:46 PM

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