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[Delirious Melody]

Pe cant eram internat in spital si eram extraordinar de plictisit am scris ceva mai in gluma mai in serios.

[i]]Every morning i wake up and stare in the mirrior
All i see in my reflection is a common sinner.
I see everything I've done and I'm to blame,
Crippled by feelings of guilt and shame.

When i look into my eyes
And see every stupid lie
Every f**king word I said,
On every damned life i fed.

Now I'm devoured by redemption
And just want to give the world affection.
Embrace myself for everything I am,
Apologize to my inner self to destroy the blame.

The night has come again and I go to sleep,
In my dreams... my inner demons i will meet.
Tomorrow I'll wake up and look into the mirror
Just to see that worthless jadded sinner.[/font]

[yaoi maniac]

Frumoasa poezie, apreciez si ca e in engleza. Unele parti chiar suna bine, insa incearca sa scrii "I" in loc de "i", fiindca altfel nu e incorect.
"On every damned life i fed" Fed? Nu inteleg la ce te referi. "In fiecare viata blestemat-o ce am hranit-o"?
Apropo, poti sa scrii si fara italic. Mi se pare ca asa se intelege mai usor, dar tu alegi.
Succes in continuare!