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Predestined paths

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Deci, esti geniala! Am asteptat 23 de capitole, insa a meritat!
Poi am vazut o greselutza, in rest e bine. Ai descris minunat, mai ales la partea nebuna. Sentimentul pe care l-a avut Ale a fost frumos conturat. Actiunea a decurs frumos, n-a fost grabita. Dialogul n-a fost sec, m-a amuzat mica cearta cu imbracatu-dezbracatu intre Ed si Ale si au fost replici amuzante si bine gandite.
Observ ca Eduard era foarte sigur pe ceea ce face si mai ales ca sigur Ale va fi multumita :> =]]
"- Stai liniștită, Pisoi! a șoptit, continuând să-mi sărute fiecare particică a corpului. Știu ce fac și mai știu că o să îți placă! " M-a amuzat ;]]
Ma bucur ca stie ce face. :>
In rest... Scri minunat si chiar ma bucur ca am ocazia sa citesc ficurile tale. Sti cum sa captezi atentia, cum sa descri, cum sa faci lucrurile sa alunece.
Cum am zis, eu sunt fana no.1.
Astept capitolul urmator, si astept si un alt hentai dinasta asa nebunatic ;;]
Succes la scris, imaginatie, nebunie etc-uri >:D<
Besculina :X
What goes around comes around.



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Predestined paths - de Minnie - 29-10-2009, 09:56 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Berry. - 29-10-2009, 10:33 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 29-10-2009, 11:21 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 01-11-2009, 02:50 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 02-11-2009, 12:01 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 17-11-2009, 08:50 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 23-11-2009, 09:17 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 28-11-2009, 04:21 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 30-11-2009, 03:43 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 04-12-2009, 03:19 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 09-12-2009, 10:24 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 16-12-2009, 07:35 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 16-12-2009, 11:27 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 18-12-2009, 02:20 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 18-12-2009, 02:33 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 18-12-2009, 12:59 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 18-12-2009, 07:40 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 22-12-2009, 11:31 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 23-12-2009, 12:00 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 24-12-2009, 02:51 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 24-12-2009, 11:39 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 26-12-2009, 02:16 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 26-12-2009, 03:54 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 27-12-2009, 12:50 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 29-12-2009, 06:53 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 30-12-2009, 06:01 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 30-12-2009, 11:26 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 02-01-2010, 02:27 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Yuki4ever - 02-01-2010, 08:14 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 03-01-2010, 03:04 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 05-01-2010, 05:40 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 06-01-2010, 11:50 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 09-01-2010, 11:18 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 11-01-2010, 03:19 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 15-01-2010, 09:36 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Blue Bluegen - 16-01-2010, 02:41 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 21-01-2010, 05:39 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Blue Bluegen - 22-01-2010, 06:12 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Khonsu - 22-01-2010, 08:46 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 24-01-2010, 03:21 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 24-01-2010, 04:26 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 25-01-2010, 07:25 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 25-01-2010, 08:46 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 27-01-2010, 01:37 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Blue Bluegen - 27-01-2010, 02:13 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 28-01-2010, 06:41 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 28-01-2010, 06:41 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 30-01-2010, 02:43 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 30-01-2010, 04:37 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Blue Bluegen - 30-01-2010, 04:50 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Lumiere.Kitty - 30-01-2010, 05:57 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 05-02-2010, 09:47 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 06-02-2010, 02:26 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 06-02-2010, 03:22 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 06-02-2010, 08:08 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 06-02-2010, 08:18 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 06-02-2010, 08:53 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 06-02-2010, 09:40 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 08-02-2010, 02:14 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 08-02-2010, 05:07 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 11-02-2010, 08:42 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 12-02-2010, 12:33 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 12-02-2010, 11:11 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 13-02-2010, 12:57 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Lumiere.Kitty - 13-02-2010, 01:58 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 13-02-2010, 04:33 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Yuki4ever - 14-02-2010, 08:21 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 18-02-2010, 04:00 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 19-02-2010, 04:35 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de marya - 20-02-2010, 11:20 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 21-02-2010, 08:11 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Mitus - 23-02-2010, 10:13 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 26-02-2010, 04:03 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 07-03-2010, 11:25 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 07-03-2010, 02:16 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Bambilici - 07-03-2010, 07:18 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 07-03-2010, 08:21 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 18-03-2010, 06:48 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Japan Lover - 24-03-2010, 10:38 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 05-04-2010, 08:35 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Yuki4ever - 05-04-2010, 10:31 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Looolaaa13 - 09-04-2010, 11:13 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Mitus - 12-04-2010, 03:50 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Fifilina - 13-04-2010, 09:47 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Aly - 15-04-2010, 02:10 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Dreamer - 30-04-2010, 09:11 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Sushiiushii - 01-05-2010, 09:52 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 20-08-2010, 12:25 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Suicide Thoughts - 01-09-2010, 10:10 PM
RE: Predestined paths - de Minnie - 10-09-2010, 12:12 AM
RE: Predestined paths - de Zouly - 17-04-2011, 12:19 AM


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