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One love pleasures more

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Buna draguta,

Pai cum s'a mai zis capitolul e muncit si destul de bun. Descrierea vad ca incepi sa te impaci destul de bine cu ea, ceea ce ma bucura, actiunea nu mi se pare grabita iar dialogul, pai e destul de bun si nu e sec. Greseli de tastatura/exprimare nu am vazut si asta e bine. Cat despre faza aia cand a iesit de sub balustrada e scrantita?! Chiar daca a inceput sa aiba sentimente pentru brunet eu tot cred ca e scrantita. Si esti o rea ca nu ai mai continuat momentul acela incitan cand a lasat scaunul pe spate, s'a pus peste ea... Sper sa'l continui in capitolul viitor!



Răspunsuri în acest subiect
One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 31-05-2011, 10:00 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 01-06-2011, 07:37 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 02-06-2011, 08:01 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 02-06-2011, 09:59 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 03-06-2011, 06:14 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Flash - 03-06-2011, 08:36 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 06-06-2011, 09:11 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 06-06-2011, 09:40 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 08-06-2011, 09:26 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 13-06-2011, 01:02 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 14-06-2011, 05:21 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 14-06-2011, 06:07 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 14-06-2011, 08:58 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 14-06-2011, 09:11 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 15-06-2011, 11:01 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 16-06-2011, 06:52 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 17-06-2011, 11:59 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de tamoshiku - 24-06-2011, 10:43 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 24-06-2011, 10:55 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 25-06-2011, 10:30 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 25-06-2011, 01:50 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Candy_Girl_Love. - 25-06-2011, 02:07 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Alicia - 25-06-2011, 05:50 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 27-06-2011, 10:23 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 05-07-2011, 06:25 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 05-07-2011, 07:46 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 06-07-2011, 11:48 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 07-07-2011, 10:41 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 16-07-2011, 01:05 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Candy_Girl_Love. - 17-07-2011, 12:11 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Zummy - 17-07-2011, 06:16 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 19-07-2011, 10:00 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de DiamondZ - 20-07-2011, 04:11 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rena - 26-07-2011, 08:19 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de AyumiHamasaki - 30-07-2011, 11:05 PM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Sho-Yo - 31-07-2011, 10:20 AM
RE: One love pleasures more - de Rose ^^ - 05-08-2011, 07:23 PM


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