20-11-2009, 02:59 PM
Hy!:D
hmm....un capitol nou:X...well modurile de expunere se imbina armonios, intr-un balans frumos, iar actiunea nu mi se pare grabita:>; imi place in mod special descrierea, in anumite parti suna chiar foarte artistic;;)
uhh...Naruto e asa de calm si ..intr-un fel romantic...iar Hina la polul opus, o rebela innascuta:P si ce caracter are...
altceva....am vazut si cateva greseli de tastare, dar nu-i nimic grav...aaa si fii atenta la virgule si "si"-uri sunt cam in exces :)...
spor la scris si la idei cat mai multe!!!:*
:bye:
hmm....un capitol nou:X...well modurile de expunere se imbina armonios, intr-un balans frumos, iar actiunea nu mi se pare grabita:>; imi place in mod special descrierea, in anumite parti suna chiar foarte artistic;;)
Citat:Cântam Moonlight, o sonata scrisa de Beethoven. Degetele mele alunecau pe claviatura pianului, mângâindu-le si abia atingându-le. Pianul, marea mea dragoste. Mereu m-am simţit atras de acest instrument magic si mirific.
uhh...Naruto e asa de calm si ..intr-un fel romantic...iar Hina la polul opus, o rebela innascuta:P si ce caracter are...
altceva....am vazut si cateva greseli de tastare, dar nu-i nimic grav...aaa si fii atenta la virgule si "si"-uri sunt cam in exces :)...
spor la scris si la idei cat mai multe!!!:*
:bye:
My fic:
Predestined paths : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13338
[naruto]Teenagers : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13050 (finish
)
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Predestined paths : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13338
[naruto]Teenagers : http://animezup.com/forum/showthread.php?tid=13050 (finish
)I wish to meet you again next time
Love is more selfish the deeper it gets
until you want to tie each breath down
unreasonable, yet...
We climb a spiral of light
the red memory is a poisonous tattoo
a tattoo that shows the future's chaos
if we're together, until we shatter
Love is more selfish the deeper it gets
until you want to tie each breath down
unreasonable, yet...
We climb a spiral of light
the red memory is a poisonous tattoo
a tattoo that shows the future's chaos
if we're together, until we shatter