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Denying myself

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ce-ti apartine ar merge mai bine fara perscurtare si anume ce iti apartine

inca mai ai acea fluctuatie in ceea ce priveste rima si unele cuvinte sunt puse in plus. dar momentan nu am timp si nici starea de spirit necesara pentru un full review:P oricum imbunatatirile se vad,si pentru asta felicitari.
ideea poeziei imi place dar e expusa intr-o maniera destul de saraca. aici mai ai de lucru.
primele 2 versuri mi-au placut,as fi vrut ca toata poezia sa fie asa..dar n-ai vrut sa-mi faci pe plac...poate data viitoare

felicitari inca odata, si scuze pt lipsa de activitate...am multe pe cap.
God?...I've surpassed him long ago....



Răspunsuri în acest subiect
Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 22-10-2010, 07:06 PM
RE: Dening myself - de Invictus - 25-10-2010, 12:45 AM
RE: Dening myself - de Child Of Sunset - 25-10-2010, 08:55 AM
RE: Dening myself - de Invictus - 29-10-2010, 01:13 AM
RE: Dening myself - de yaoi maniac - 29-10-2010, 04:28 PM
RE: Dening myself - de Child Of Sunset - 29-10-2010, 07:31 PM
RE: Dening myself - de Cătă - 29-10-2010, 07:47 PM
RE: Dening myself - de yaoi maniac - 29-10-2010, 08:49 PM
RE: Dening myself - de Invictus - 30-10-2010, 01:40 AM
RE: Dening myself - de Child Of Sunset - 30-10-2010, 08:47 PM
RE: Dening myself - de yaoi maniac - 30-10-2010, 09:00 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 01-11-2010, 08:58 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Invictus - 01-11-2010, 10:54 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 03-11-2010, 11:43 AM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 13-11-2010, 10:47 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Invictus - 14-11-2010, 01:04 AM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 15-11-2010, 09:06 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Invictus - 24-11-2010, 10:47 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 24-11-2010, 11:06 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 06-12-2010, 08:06 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 09-12-2010, 02:46 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 12-12-2010, 10:35 AM
RE: Denying myself - de Invictus - 13-12-2010, 12:26 AM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 13-12-2010, 09:10 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 16-12-2010, 10:42 AM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 19-12-2010, 09:59 AM
RE: Denying myself - de ohaio_angel - 19-12-2010, 07:57 PM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 20-12-2010, 11:43 AM
RE: Denying myself - de Child Of Sunset - 22-12-2010, 02:25 PM


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