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Because we are rebels!

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Ok...yeey sunt prima...Vad ca te-ai mai corectat in unele parti dar ai decazut in unele. Ceea ce nu imi place e ca unele actiuni le faci fara sens ( de exemplu: eu nu am inteles de ce fetele i-au lovit pe baieti). Si ce rost a avut cina aia? Ca nu ai precizat nimic de ea din cate am vazut eu. Si ma enerveaza faptul ca ficul pierde din originalitate. Cina cu familia Uchiha, faptul ca sta cu Sasuke in banca, descrierea dusului...Pfui, sunt multe exemple. Incearca sa nu copii actiuni din celelalte ficuri, ci creeaza-le tu singura. Si sunt multe greseli de ortografie si exprimare, iar unele propozitii nu au sens. Ceea ce imi place e ca l-ai pus si pe Deidara p-acolo. Si apropo, cine-i Kira? Ca nu ai zis nimic despre personajul asta.

Chuu :X :* si Gabate. Astept nextul.
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Răspunsuri în acest subiect
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Kiddoxx. - 06-10-2010, 03:52 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Ada - 06-10-2010, 04:56 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de InocentAngel - 06-10-2010, 08:08 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Shadow. - 06-10-2010, 09:14 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Biscu' iz back ^^ - 06-10-2010, 09:40 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Debb.' - 06-10-2010, 09:44 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Yun. - 06-10-2010, 10:08 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Axel . - 07-10-2010, 06:12 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Kiddoxx. - 08-10-2010, 02:48 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Yun. - 08-10-2010, 06:52 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Kiddoxx. - 11-10-2010, 03:05 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Shadow. - 28-10-2010, 06:36 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 06-11-2010, 10:05 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 11-11-2010, 04:40 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Flash - 12-11-2010, 10:51 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de KarinaD - 18-11-2010, 10:13 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 18-11-2010, 10:18 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de _Andreea_ - 19-11-2010, 04:54 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Yun. - 19-11-2010, 05:54 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Daria - 19-11-2010, 11:29 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 20-11-2010, 06:17 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 20-11-2010, 11:56 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Yun. - 21-11-2010, 09:52 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de KarinaD - 21-11-2010, 12:46 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 22-11-2010, 12:04 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 23-11-2010, 04:13 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de KarinaD - 23-11-2010, 07:22 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Dufresne - 23-11-2010, 07:44 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Zuzy Is Angell - 23-11-2010, 08:35 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 23-11-2010, 08:37 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de _Andreea_ - 23-11-2010, 09:02 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de _Andreea_ - 24-11-2010, 11:20 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Lilishor - 26-11-2010, 08:13 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 26-11-2010, 08:26 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Zuzy Is Angell - 14-12-2010, 11:44 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Yun. - 14-12-2010, 04:29 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de _Andreea_ - 14-12-2010, 08:36 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Daria - 16-12-2010, 12:14 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Dufresne - 16-12-2010, 03:52 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 17-12-2010, 04:37 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 21-12-2010, 10:09 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 28-12-2010, 12:15 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de crisy_bby - 28-12-2010, 01:00 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Mariah . - 28-12-2010, 01:45 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Zuzy Is Angell - 02-01-2011, 01:55 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 17-01-2011, 07:14 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Mariah . - 17-01-2011, 08:53 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Zuzy Is Angell - 17-01-2011, 11:27 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Zuzy Is Angell - 19-01-2011, 01:19 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de _Andreea_ - 19-01-2011, 05:31 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Too Many Dreams. - 19-01-2011, 10:08 PM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Moon princess - 20-01-2011, 12:46 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Daria - 23-01-2011, 12:43 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de KarinaD - 14-02-2011, 12:25 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de Rose ^^ - 14-04-2011, 11:21 AM
RE: Because we are rebels! - de KiDda - 18-04-2011, 11:20 PM


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