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Aripi insangerate

Hi>:D<…Stiu ca nu am reusit sa-mi duc la bun sfarsit promisiunea, si nu cred ca mai are rost sa-ti spun cat de rau imi pare, o sa-mi astept pedeapsa binemeritata.
Sa revenim la fic, decurge perfect, nu stiu ce altceva in afara de laude as putea spune la adresa acestui fic, cu exceptia unor capitole mai vechi, daca nu ma insel ultimul si penultimul capitol al partii I, in care ai lasat sa-ti scape cateva( mai multe) greseli de tastare. In partea a II-a nu am gasit nimic, inafara de vreo 3-4 “i-au”, despre care ti-am mai spus de cateva ori.
Povestea devine din ce in ce mai interesanta, incalcita si captivanta, ne dai rapunsul la unele intrebari si in acelasi timp creezi noi mistere in ceea ce priveste istoria ingerilor si a demonilor, astfel reusesti sa captivezi cititorii.
Din nou am observant o usoara lipsa de spatiu, nu chiar in capitol, ci intre capitol si restul postului. In utimul post am obervat aceasta greseala, si unde, dupa prerea mea ar fi aratat bine si un scurt titlu, si daca spuneai ca scrii capitolele inainte, atunci iti este si mai usor, deoarece stii daca un anumit capitol are o parte a doua si ai putea sa scrii “partea a I-a ”, sau “partea a II-a” inaintea fiecarui capitol (scuze, nu ma pricep la explicat...) Ai fi avut o scuza daca te hotarai pe parcurs si nu ai fi stiut cat de lung e capitolul.
Cam atat…chiar si mie mi se pare aiurea sa las un comm. atat de scurt dupa o absenta atat de lunga…gata, acum poti sa ma omori:d
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Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 15-09-2009, 06:29 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 15-09-2009, 11:08 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de ~X~LoVeLeSs~X~ - 16-09-2009, 10:29 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 19-09-2009, 10:21 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Zyspar - 20-09-2009, 12:24 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 21-09-2009, 10:20 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 24-09-2009, 02:23 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 27-09-2009, 09:56 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 29-09-2009, 08:53 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 02-10-2009, 04:31 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 05-10-2009, 10:32 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 08-10-2009, 10:38 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 11-10-2009, 10:09 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 18-10-2009, 09:29 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 21-10-2009, 02:26 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 24-10-2009, 12:44 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 27-10-2009, 01:12 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 01-11-2009, 03:30 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 04-11-2009, 05:56 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 08-11-2009, 08:09 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 12-11-2009, 12:45 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 20-11-2009, 01:53 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 25-11-2009, 03:05 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 30-11-2009, 02:30 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 01-12-2009, 01:30 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 03-12-2009, 04:28 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 04-12-2009, 04:09 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 06-12-2009, 11:12 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 07-12-2009, 09:42 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 10-12-2009, 03:35 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 12-12-2009, 02:41 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 14-12-2009, 06:11 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 15-12-2009, 11:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 16-12-2009, 08:47 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 17-12-2009, 12:33 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 18-12-2009, 03:21 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 20-12-2009, 12:51 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 22-12-2009, 11:42 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de A'Svear - 23-12-2009, 08:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 24-12-2009, 02:08 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 24-12-2009, 05:14 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Axxa.No.Way - 25-12-2009, 12:14 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 26-12-2009, 02:09 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 26-12-2009, 03:17 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 28-12-2009, 01:38 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Axxa.No.Way - 29-12-2009, 07:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 30-12-2009, 03:56 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 15-01-2010, 12:37 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 15-01-2010, 08:26 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 21-01-2010, 11:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 28-01-2010, 11:29 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 06-02-2010, 02:19 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de TrieuTriTrinh - 06-02-2010, 12:52 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de marya - 06-02-2010, 03:36 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Aly - 10-02-2010, 02:51 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 12-02-2010, 08:24 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de TrieuTriTrinh - 12-02-2010, 11:20 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 16-02-2010, 01:48 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de TrieuTriTrinh - 19-02-2010, 11:07 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 05-03-2010, 05:44 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Minnie - 11-03-2010, 10:37 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 16-03-2010, 07:36 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 26-03-2010, 01:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 29-03-2010, 02:19 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 01-04-2010, 12:06 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 06-04-2010, 10:35 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 09-04-2010, 04:20 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 12-04-2010, 03:31 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 17-04-2010, 12:38 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 17-04-2010, 12:56 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 21-04-2010, 05:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 22-04-2010, 03:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 22-04-2010, 05:35 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 28-04-2010, 07:06 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 03-05-2010, 06:05 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 11-05-2010, 09:06 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 11-05-2010, 09:30 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 03-06-2010, 08:41 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 04-06-2010, 04:54 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de TrieuTriTrinh - 05-06-2010, 04:07 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 17-06-2010, 01:27 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 21-06-2010, 04:48 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 01-07-2010, 05:18 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de dark.blue - 04-07-2010, 04:15 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 05-07-2010, 08:40 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 05-07-2010, 08:47 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 11-07-2010, 01:49 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 12-07-2010, 02:55 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 05-08-2010, 12:33 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de dark.blue - 10-08-2010, 10:39 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 12-08-2010, 06:24 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 26-08-2010, 08:48 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 27-08-2010, 08:45 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Akane Hime - 01-09-2010, 08:22 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 23-09-2010, 03:27 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 23-09-2010, 07:59 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 22-10-2010, 03:28 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 12-11-2010, 09:40 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 14-11-2010, 07:13 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 23-11-2010, 10:00 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 18-12-2010, 04:49 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 18-12-2010, 05:32 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 18-12-2010, 10:04 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Hanna2300 - 18-12-2010, 10:18 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 19-12-2010, 03:16 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 20-12-2010, 11:18 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Reine - 21-12-2010, 12:19 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 21-12-2010, 07:53 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 22-12-2010, 09:38 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 24-12-2010, 02:24 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 08-01-2011, 12:11 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 08-01-2011, 04:39 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 29-01-2011, 04:15 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Whisky - 30-01-2011, 04:43 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 08-02-2011, 08:11 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 13-02-2011, 04:06 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Reine - 13-02-2011, 07:09 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 13-02-2011, 07:34 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 19-02-2011, 04:18 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 19-02-2011, 06:50 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 19-02-2011, 11:20 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 20-02-2011, 05:09 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 18-03-2011, 07:52 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 18-03-2011, 08:46 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 19-03-2011, 11:01 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 23-03-2011, 05:19 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 01-04-2011, 07:50 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 01-04-2011, 09:47 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 01-04-2011, 09:57 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Reine - 06-04-2011, 02:37 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 04-05-2011, 07:37 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 04-05-2011, 08:43 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 29-05-2011, 09:26 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 13-06-2011, 07:00 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 13-06-2011, 10:27 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 15-06-2011, 09:21 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 03-07-2011, 02:54 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Lanna - 06-07-2011, 04:25 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 16-07-2011, 01:14 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 17-08-2011, 07:19 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Dark Blue - 21-08-2011, 03:06 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 10-09-2011, 05:01 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 12-10-2011, 10:17 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de ciupaciup - 12-10-2011, 06:23 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Bad Blood. - 15-10-2011, 04:49 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 30-10-2011, 12:59 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 18-12-2011, 03:38 PM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de BloodyInnocence - 07-02-2012, 12:35 AM
RE: Aripi insangerate - de Katniss - 08-02-2012, 01:46 AM

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