Nu ești un membru încă? Înregistrează-te acum!
Creează un cont nou  

Yakuza's boss in love +18

#36
Multumesc ca m-ai anuntat! ^^

Asa deci.. ce as putea spune. Capitolul mi-a placut foarte mult. Defapt, toate capitolele imi plac. In fine, pai sincera sa fiu te descurci chiar foarte bine! Chiar nu am ce comenta. Dialogul este in cantitati potrivite si deloc sec. Te folosesti de el cu cap. Naratiunea.. e ca la carte. Ce sa mai spun? Imi place cum narezi. Descriere.. mie una mi se pare destul de ok. Imi place cum descri toate scenele din capitol. Greseli nu am vazut. Poate au fost dar deh, cine se mai uita dupa ele cand actiunea curge asa frumos. Ai un stil foarte ordonat de a lucra si asta ador la un fic.
OMG, saraca Sakura! Si-a cerut-o cum a spus si Sas'ke. Ah, dar pana la urma o s-o salveze nu-i asa? Doar nu poate sa o lase acolo pur si simplu. -.-'

Te astept cu nextul cat mai repede.
Bafta si multa, multa inspiratie in continuare!
Bye, bye!
:bye:



Răspunsuri în acest subiect
Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 03-12-2009, 10:04 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 05-12-2009, 06:24 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 06-12-2009, 04:27 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 07-12-2009, 07:42 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 10-12-2009, 03:39 PM
RE: [SasuSaku] Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 16-12-2009, 02:23 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 24-12-2009, 12:19 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 31-12-2009, 04:04 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rallu^^ - 18-01-2010, 10:52 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ellamanu - 23-01-2010, 11:34 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Vir - 22-02-2010, 02:31 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 23-02-2010, 07:59 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Adri@n@ - 25-02-2010, 08:45 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 17-03-2010, 06:54 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Teki - 02-04-2010, 11:10 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 04-04-2010, 10:23 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Teki - 06-04-2010, 06:55 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 20-04-2010, 10:41 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Crazy Person - 21-04-2010, 06:12 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 10-05-2011, 08:19 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Bonnie - 11-05-2011, 06:44 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sho-Yo - 11-05-2011, 09:30 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 11-05-2011, 10:00 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 11-05-2011, 10:32 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 12-05-2011, 09:41 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 13-05-2011, 03:26 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 13-05-2011, 04:56 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 13-05-2011, 06:57 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 13-05-2011, 08:19 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sho-Yo - 13-05-2011, 08:24 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 13-05-2011, 09:28 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Bonnie - 13-05-2011, 09:38 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 13-05-2011, 10:57 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 16-05-2011, 10:52 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Alle - 17-05-2011, 02:42 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Flash - 17-05-2011, 09:49 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 21-05-2011, 09:55 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 21-05-2011, 01:37 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 21-05-2011, 02:27 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 21-05-2011, 02:52 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 21-05-2011, 03:06 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Alle - 21-05-2011, 05:06 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 21-05-2011, 06:02 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 21-05-2011, 08:39 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sho-Yo - 21-05-2011, 09:50 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 22-05-2011, 12:06 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de BalonaÅŸ - 29-05-2011, 05:28 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 30-05-2011, 07:37 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 30-05-2011, 08:54 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 30-05-2011, 08:57 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 30-05-2011, 09:56 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 30-05-2011, 10:16 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 31-05-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 31-05-2011, 10:48 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Katniss - 03-06-2011, 11:51 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 04-06-2011, 01:38 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 04-06-2011, 02:24 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de RouXiss Đx - 04-06-2011, 03:39 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Debb.' - 04-06-2011, 03:48 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Fifilina - 04-06-2011, 05:27 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 04-06-2011, 05:50 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 05-06-2011, 09:27 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 05-06-2011, 12:45 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 05-06-2011, 02:24 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ^Ciresica^ - 08-06-2011, 09:20 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 12-06-2011, 09:43 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ^Ciresica^ - 12-06-2011, 10:14 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 12-06-2011, 12:53 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 12-06-2011, 01:03 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 12-06-2011, 02:44 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 12-06-2011, 03:29 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 12-06-2011, 04:03 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nywa - 13-06-2011, 10:11 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Rose ^^ - 13-06-2011, 11:14 AM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Sasame - 13-06-2011, 01:14 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Daria - 13-06-2011, 01:18 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Nixu - 13-06-2011, 02:54 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de ^Ciresica^ - 14-06-2011, 12:46 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ame - 14-06-2011, 12:56 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Ayuu. - 15-06-2011, 06:33 PM
RE: Yakuza's boss in love +18 - de Miranda. - 17-06-2011, 11:03 PM

Subiecte de discuție similare...
Subiect: Autor Răspunsuri: Vizite: Ultimul răspuns
  Mafia's boss,with love! Laylaa 2 2.244 02-09-2011, 09:03 PM
Ultimul răspuns: Laylaa
  Indragostita de seful Yakuza denieverlove lovever 7 4.954 21-08-2011, 04:30 PM
Ultimul răspuns: Miranda.
  Life among the Yakuza II +18 Sho-Yo 16 9.336 08-08-2011, 03:59 PM
Ultimul răspuns: RouXiss Đx
  Life among the Yakuza Sho-Yo 49 28.643 24-07-2011, 08:34 PM
Ultimul răspuns: Miranda.


Utilizatori care citesc acest subiect:
1 Vizitator(i)